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E Muja Oui
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E Muja Oui |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Look into my mind, And see what you fear. I am your worst enemy, You're the prey, my dear! "Tears of Kasai" kisses the air, Slashing, hacking, dicing... Slivering it's own dispair! With you on it's lips... Enigmas sandwiched in pain, sent this vile climate upon us. But the blade of my love--- Not just pain, but glorious. Gods tremble, planets die. At each lacking moment--- Without you, I cry. Secretly, I want you to hear my plea. Help me overcome my pride, And let us work this through... E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i liked this. but not as much as your other work. i really really loved the line 'you're the prey my dear!' ooh i wish i could steal it. :: sigh :: but no, i was cursed with theses horrible things called morals. and just to be mean, they threw in some decency. :: sigh :: oh well, one can dream. nicely done. /jen/ oh, and ps. just a rant because i'm kind of freaking. why is it that i keep hearing people moving around in my house? i'm all alone. this is not the first time either. i always hear it. am i crazy or something? i mean, this is a brand new frickin house!! it's only four months old, it hasn't had time to become haunted. no one's died yet. hmmmmm... perplexing indeed. what do you say my dear alex? oh, and the ironic thing is, when i was living over in wolesley a while back, the house was almost ninety years old. and i never heard a sound. grrrrr... i'm so confuzzled. ::shrugs:: /jenagain/ at first i wondered why white oleander was in the six dollar bargain bin. and then i read it. [This message has been edited by quietlydying (10-19-2002 02:05 AM).] |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
...erm---thanks for the interesting reply...ever consider that your house it haunted? E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i'm wondering. but how could it be? i mean, all of those ghosts of the empty field!! :: shrugs :: /jen/ at first i wondered why white oleander was in the six dollar bargain bin. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Nono---not empty! Look at it poetically! See? Now there's MANY ghosts! *nods assuringly* E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
*clapping* Smashing, Alex, one of the best I've read from you in a while. The meter stalls a few times, but overall, intruging, dank and moody, deep, dark with feelings lurking about. Thanks for the read.  Though you didn't write it for me.  Sincerely, Titus "My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems." |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Very observant, it was indeed written for someone! And this fine peice of work, will make more sense for their eyes... E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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Android 18 Member
since 2002-02-20
Posts 61Austrailia (My DreamLand) |
OH i really enjoyed this one.... I agree w/Jen, that the line "You're the prey my dear" just wonderful! Look forward to more from you Serena |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Loved it, perfect Alex....Great Job! Riley ~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~ |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hey! Thanks for reading, Serena! Mmmm---and I think it's far from perfect, Riley. But thanks for your opinion! E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot. Very well written, but the message was confusing seeing as how I had no idea what the title meant, nor kassai, or something. Explain that buddy hehe  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
NICE, Alex. NICE. I'm going to have nightmares about you now! Woo freaky...  Learn to place poetry before people |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Javier- Kasai, in the Japanese language means 'Fire'. If you wanna know what "Tears of Kasai" means---you'll have to get to know me better! Brian- Hmmmm...more interesting of a responce than I expected! E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... [This message has been edited by Android 17 (10-21-2002 01:41 AM).] |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Aw, hon... This is about HER isn't it. *hugs you tight* you know where to find me You are so my hero! |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
ALEX I LOVE THIS... IT'S AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!! Delaney says YOU ROCK YOU ROCK! It's cool!...way cool!!!!1 REALLY GOOD.... Great job...I love your poem...And just so you know...im one of you biggest fans!!!!!!!! lalalalala love you poems! ttyl! |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. |
awesome work. absolutely awesome. i agree with other on that line being great. (you're the prey my dear). just a note new houses can be haunted too. ~~*lil cherry*~~ |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Rhonda- J-E-N-O-V-A Delaney- Hehehe---it's a given that you'll like my work! Hahaha...I'm just yankin' ya! I'm so glad you've come to checking PiP so often! Thank you for readin'! ^_^Lil Cherry- Hehehe...REALLY cute screen name! Thank you for the input! I'll try to get out there and read your work too! E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Yup you know me WAY too well Alex...It's a given that i'd like your work since it's really good....and cuz your a AWESOME WRITER!... I LOVE your work.... Im your BIGGEST fan...well when it comes to writing atleast!...LOL |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Again, thank you Delaney! E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Aww your welcome Alex.... Why does everyone have to be so cruel... Yes as you would have guessed... Something else bad happened... Just like me and Krystn sensed something bad would happen...And he bother got hit in the head witha foot ball and i got called names by 2 of my "friends"... It's a curse....A terrible,Terrible CURSE! |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Life's just full of surprises, now ain't it? E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Hey sweetheart, It's been one helluva long week, that's for sure. Im glad you're willing enough to work this through  E Muja Oui (should be the new language  )
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
*smiles* So am I... E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
YO ALEX! Sup?....Thank you for posting on my poem!!!!!!!!!! |
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clumsy Member
since 2002-10-10
Posts 106canada. |
i love this alex! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Alex~ Look...it's a reply from me! lol I know I don't often get a chance to reply, but I do want you to know that I do enjoy reading your poetry and, though you may not always see my name on a thread, it doesn't mean I'm not watching, reading, and appreciating your work. I like this piece very much and especially enjoy the symbolism that you use so well. Keep up the great work! ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (10-21-2002 08:01 PM).] |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Awww, thanks guys! Jessica, Vivi---THANKS! ^_^ E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh... |
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rimmie Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 45Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Very well done you never seem to suprise me! I loved this poem! (Im thinking of two people it could be adressed to...but id rather not guess) [This message has been edited by rimmie (11-09-2002 10:44 PM).] |
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