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blueyedlioness
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
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0 posted 2003-08-10 12:26 PM


Hello, poets. I'm back.
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Darkness falling on the ground,
Music loud, the only sound.
The raindrops start to softly fall,
'Til heaven's tears envelop all.

Thankyou to the raindrops
Crying for me.
I've cried until I cannot weep,
But anguish deep inside I keep.
Thankyou to the angels -
For crying rain for me.

Wipers wipe away the tears
Hidden for so many years -
If I drive a little faster,
Will I die and find the answers?
Singing of my hopeless life,
All the things I love to fight,
Singing of the day I die,
Thinking of the times you lied,
If I scream a little louder -
Screaming just a little louder -
Will it make the pain retreat?
Will it stop the broken beat?

Thankyou to the dark, cold drops
Raining down on me.
Thankyou to the golden angels
Crying rain for me.

© Copyright 2003 Laura - All Rights Reserved
OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19
Posts 245

1 posted 2003-08-10 09:31 PM


I like it i like it i like it!

All the lines are absolutely spectacular, but most of them are and the filler lines give you time to think-- i love this SO MUCH you have no idea. From the first stanza I knew it would be a favorite because it just flows so well its like a song. wowowowowowow you are my favoritooo

~cassiopeia

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2 posted 2003-08-10 11:41 PM


"If I drive a little faster,
Will I die and find the answers?"


*sigh* I wish it worked that way. Nice to see you back, you've been missed

There's nothing as unbreakable as the bond between an Arabian and her person

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
3 posted 2003-08-11 12:00 PM


*Sighs...*

It's been such a long time since I've read a poem as touching as this one. I feel, that this is the type of poem that makes you sit back and think, almost in awe when you're done reading it.

I've been posting/reading poems on here for quite a while...and I used to enjoy reading yours...glad to see your back!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

Song_for_Serenity
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 97
USA
4 posted 2003-08-11 01:29 AM


Hey there! Wonderful poem. Beautifully heartfelt. I've missed your writing. It's great to see it again. Anyhoo, have a spiffy day and keep up the good work!
Sealed with a

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

blueyedlioness
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
USA
5 posted 2003-08-11 09:19 PM


Awww! Thankyou! You all always make me feel better. Thankyou so much for all your support and kind words. I may disappear occasionally, but I'll always be back... this place is just too special. *love*

-Lioness

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