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Jaime

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Posts 250

0 posted 2003-08-06 03:33 PM

I heard a song and a sip
of tea too strong for me,
But I took it anyway
The way bells ring
sometimes only
in the West

I’d like to think time
would wait for me in the
cloud pockets like bags
collecting mail, slow this
down slow me down
So I can feel this

My skin never dries
under the paper raincoat,
And she says, “Well at least
when its wet it can’t cut
you” but she doesn’t know
She doesn’t know that I
would love to bleed

Some colour in the
grey, some ice cream
sandwiches and peanut butter
Some light caught in the leaves
The green

I need some in me

But the paper just molds
to me and tears and makes its
way towards my feet and I’m
not sure what is worse
to be bare or to know that I
am defenseless anyway

I suppose it doesn’t matter
now

It’s always raining
with or without my paper
raincoat and all I can do

is wait

072903

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

jaime.

Pollita
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity

1 posted 2003-08-06 03:41 PM

I liked this, its great for showing how you feel, good stuff!
thanks for sharing! *hugs*
Hope things'll b ok!

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-08-06 05:10 PM

I'm not sure what is worse, being bare or to know that I'm defenseless anyway.
Great line, great poem. Its quite perfect. It has a beautiful quality to it. Light but flavorful.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2003-08-06 06:05 PM

Hey Jamie, nice write. Its kinda like life in general. Hey if youd like to read any of my stuff I usually post in dark. Its the way I usually feel.

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Rise of Truth
Member

since 2003-07-12

Posts 59
Beneath the Fury Sun

4 posted 2003-08-09 03:15 PM

Definately a good show of irony. I too, long for the green in a biege world.

Listen deep, ye product of fleshs sinned! Forget mystery! For i am a thing deeper still.

SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

5 posted 2003-08-09 09:20 PM

this poem was unbelievable. just the way you structured it and your language...wow. great job.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

6 posted 2003-08-10 12:09 PM

I haven't read very much of your poetry, but this was beautifully written. I love the feeling woven through it. Nice...

-Lioness

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