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Teen Poetry #6
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babygurl55
Junior Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 18
0 posted 2003-07-16 10:26 PM


Someone You Can Never Be
I finally saw the real you
Now I know why I never knew
I guess I just couldn't see
That you could actually hurt me

You talk about me behind my back
And the guy I like now has something you lack
He is something you will never be
Cause he will actually love me

You took away the respect I had for you
But like I have said I have found someone knew
I closed the door to my heart and threw away the key
Because I don't believe that someone will actually love me

Now I know I will never love you again
And I doubt we shall ever be friends
Because you will never measure up to what a friend is worth,
And I don't know anyone else who is like that on this whole earth
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Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2003-07-16 10:28 PM

hmm...nothing jumped out to me in this piece. The flow was really off. It was ok.
~Lex
dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584
2 posted 2003-07-17 12:58 PM

owch!!  this is my fault.
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