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Teen Poetry #6

i only wanted you

gorJess
Junior Member

since 2003-03-24

Posts 15
new zealand

0 posted 2003-06-19 05:43 AM

1000 words couldnt bring you back, i know because ive tried
neither could 1000 tears, i know because ive cried
you left behind a broken heart and happy memories too
but i never wanted memories, i only wanted you

Daddys little girl, but not the girl that daddy knew, daddy never had a clue

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-06-19 11:28 PM

i feel you. im in that exact position right now.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

2 posted 2003-06-20 10:04 PM

Hello... to both of you. And welcome.

I like the poem... you have a nice feel for rhyme, rhythm, the whole thing... however... it's awfully short. May I suggest adding a few verses?

Can't wait to see more.

-Lioness

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