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Losing A Friend
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Losing A Friend |
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AmyChristine New Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 1 |
Why should I bother, why should I try when all you'll do is say whatever or not even give me a blink of an eye. When will this stop why does it last so long? Is it because I'm boring or did new fish come along? Yes I think it was the new fish oh how I envy them so. Taking up my time with you but you would always go. Without the blink of an eye you find time for them, cuz they’re new and exciting, and I guess cool and new, is not I. How long has it been? Since we first met? ah yes we were 5 and you couldn’t pronounce my name! Ah yes those were the days when I didn’t have to worry about new and exciting people stealing you away. All we had to worry was sand in our shoes and wind in our hair. But why is it now with the blink of an eye you can leave me here and not expect me to cry? Not expect me to care, think "oh she wont care, I’ve known her too long, she doesn’t care....." Oh your wrong. I thought our friendship was extremely strong. Not a tornado nor earthquake could shake our bond. In rain and shine not a storm could make us shiver. No ma'am. But all that is what I used to feel. I'm used to all the excuses. I'm used to all the lies. I guess they don’t hurt as much, but yet, why do I still cry? I’m a very strong person. I don’t cry a lot. Only when something gets my blood boiling like a pot. And yes you do. make my blood boil. You think nothing of it. Say oh, well maybe if I say this she'll not get so hot. Now we bicker and fight so much more than chat. We cant even go through a conversation with out fighting like dogs and cats. I'm used to the fighting. I'm used to the pain. Should this be how a friendships become? I thought they were supposed to be life-long. I guess I heard wrong. Maybe you'll actually think about what I say. You know I’m not yelling at you to her my own voice, I know what I sound like its not my choice. To scream and yell and be upset That’s just how it goes because you are a mess. Its not my fault only you make it sound so because blaming it on me sounds to you, just the way to go. I wont accept it. All I've tried to do is keep you close, close like we were. You've been slowly slipping away for a good while now. maybe 5 months...... I cant seem to let you go, or forget that you exist. Even though I try so hard, but that just isn’t gist. I don’t want our friendship to end even though now we only have nothing, I'm still holding on to the memories of yesterday. I know you've long forgotten them or maybe not you sure don’t act like you have but you sure don’t seem to make an effort to try to make me happy. But as you once said, "That’s the pot callin' the kettle black." I have made an effort, you know its true but remember, there's no way I could pin this on you. Guess what. This is all your fault. maybe we'll be friends again someday. maybe we wont. Its all your fault you let the friendship crumble to pieces right in front of your eyes. remember this all happened with just an overlook of your friend, and important friend that knows more about you than you could ever imagine, you just overlooked me with the blink of and eye. |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
Fantastic first poem, I love the way you experiment with the rhyme scheme it starts off fairly solid but different verses are structured in different ways, but it still has structure which stops it drifting into free verse. As for the language there was nothing complicated with it, it was simple and straightforward which can often be very effective. Hope to see more in the near future. Everybody hurts, take comfort in your friends, cos everybody hurts sometimes |
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tonia Junior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 41taiwan |
hey, i think your poem is really good, things like that happens all the time in reality, and your poem seems to show how most people feel after losing their best friends. maybe you can try writing another poem...but putting yourself in another status. maybe you can create a more distinct perspective! tonia =) |
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jayd Junior Member
since 2003-05-04
Posts 13 |
Hey nice poem its really hard losing a friend and ure poem explains just what can happen and how hurt u can feel about it. good work and keep writing |
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