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Teen Poetry #6

Free Write Poem

HardHitter
Junior Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 23

0 posted 2003-06-07 01:02 AM

I did not really have any goal to this poem, just a free write to experience with different rhyme flows.  What do you think?

With the stars out tonight, shine’n bright, who every knew I could express my emotions on this paper, I write,
once again, I begin, thinkin of my twistedist times,
then turnin them into some of the sickedist rhymes,
playin tricks on the peoples unlogical minds.
They don't understand what these words mean, each word represents a piece of pain I've seen,
I've tried to keep it clean, just to get infected by the uneducated mean.
Why do I express these emotions, only seventeen, and already feelin like drownin in the ocean of misery,
can't you see, I need the fuel to breath,
gaspin for the last, it's time to leave,this body,
so just unzip my skin, I'm unleashed within,
the depression that I keep myself in, now I begin,
remeberin the good times I've experienced,
remembrance of the popularity that has gotten to me, dunno who I wanna be,
let time tell, let the stronger side come out of me.
Now that I grow, the bads gotta go,
strippin me slowly of the years of the smiles I show.
I stand up stronger then before, body battered and still a'little bit sore,
but like they say, when it rains it pours, the scars are yours,
for the remembrance of the period that could of ended your sentence,
let the night falls, the bright call for the sun to shine,
get myself back in line, as the new hype need is finally mine.

LegalSecret69
Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 69
Virginia

1 posted 2003-06-07 08:00 AM

This poem was pretty good...it had alot of scattered visions. You have a unique talent. Keep up the good work... "Secret"

laurie
Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 153
canada, ontario

2 posted 2003-06-07 11:33 AM

interesting. l like. a lot of words that simply drive the idea home... l like, hard hitter. keep writing, l'm lookin forward to reading more of your stuff..
laurie.

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