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a deer in lifes headlites
Junior Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 23

0 posted 2003-06-06 10:34 PM

Sometimes I feel i'm doing it all in vane
Trying to get you back again
Everytime i think i'm close to getting you back
I'm blindsided by the ghost of what I thought we had
Sometimes I wonder why i even bother, I know how it'll end
I'll be left torn and broken hearted wondering how it all got started again
The other day I was thinking of you
And how you used to laugh at my jokes even they werent funny
And I know it would be worth while
Just to once more see you smile

laurie
Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 153
canada, ontario

1 posted 2003-06-06 11:02 PM

l like. lt's a good poem, and you've made even me understand what it's like to lose someoen special... l'm sorry you're hurting, maybe you'll find what you've lost...
laurie.
ps, l really do like.

infinite disaster
Member

since 2003-06-01

Posts 69
Illinois

2 posted 2003-06-06 11:08 PM

hey steve! awww, that was a good poem!!! *sighs* i def. know what the poem expresses. good write again steve! i'll ttyl!
much love, akie

LegalSecret69
Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 69
Virginia

3 posted 2003-06-07 09:49 AM

Steve??? (That's your name...right?) Anyway, this was a really good write. Keep up the good work... I'll be looking for more. "Secret"

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

4 posted 2003-06-07 02:21 PM

thats a really good poem. Reminds me of a guy. nice write

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

5 posted 2003-06-07 02:47 PM

Hmm...I liked this. The rhyming scheme was a little inconsistant, but other than that, the poem was very good. I really like this. I'll definetly look for more of your writing!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

lingering thoughts
Member

since 2003-05-03

Posts 70
Illinois, USA

6 posted 2003-06-24 10:11 PM

ugh ! i should have wrote that ... i relate to the whole thing ! hehe
CaSSandra

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

7 posted 2003-06-24 10:33 PM

I really love this poem. I can relate to it very well.
I especially love the last line!
Excellent job!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

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