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Purple Quotations |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Shadows fall to wooden sandals with velvet straps and buckles; her hippie shoes, she calls them, the run away with me shoes, they say, be careful if you see them, you'll never see her again. Raindanced and distraught, pumpkin seeds don't fill the soul the way they fill your stomach when all you eat is air and everything seems to fill you up, all the words take up too much space inside of her and there is no room for food or difference. Make someone happy, she says, like I never did for you, you're wonderful but you'll never realize any of it and if you did, would it really matter anyway? Her eyes light up with the sounds of those quotations, those word written in purple ink, scribbled across stones and thrown into the bottom of a long forgotten well, springs of tears provide water for eternity as long as you continue to make her cry. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow! This is so cool, I love the style. "Her eyes light up with the sounds of those quotations, those word written in purple ink, scribbled across stones and thrown into the bottom of a long forgotten well, springs of tears provide water for eternity as long as you continue to make her cry." What a perfect last stanza!! My favourite bit!! Thanks for sharing  Luv, Liz xx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks much. |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Oh, wow. Okay, people... *points to Allysa* ... look here... this is where you're trying to get... Awesome. As some of you know, I don't much like un-rhyming things... and I rarely write un-rhyming things. And most of the ones I read... I don't reply to. This one, however... you've used beautiful words and imagery to really bring out the feeling and interest and capture the reader. Can't wait to read more. -Lioness |
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snoduck Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 99Selah, WA |
wow i really love your style. This particular piece is abstract, yet it all fits together. I really enjoyed the read, thanks for posting! -Erica- |
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