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babygurl55
Junior Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 18

0 posted 2003-05-31 12:52 PM

Dear Parents

I am daring,
I am bold,
I will not do what I'm told.
I'm a dreamer,
I'm a queen,
I am everything in between.
I cry secret tears,
I can't let anyone kno my fears.
I'm coming of age,
I've barely started.
I'm a girl stndng where,
The roads have parted.
I'm smart yet confused,
I'm weak yet I'm strong.
I'll make my decision,
No matter what's wrong.
I am temped,
My heart aches,
Bu these are decisions,
That I must make.
I know that you are scared,
Of what you'll find,
On this journey though dangerous times.
But you must understand,
No matterwhat you say,
I will break free,
And go my own way.

snoduck
Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

1 posted 2003-05-31 04:03 PM

You know... I really like the way you took the title and related the poem. It was really good. thanks for posting!

-Erica-

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

2 posted 2003-05-31 09:06 PM

First of all, welcome to piptalk!

I can see we have yet another talented poet here. Nice job on that... you kept the rhyme very well. The only thing I would object to is that the meter seemed to get a few more beats with each line. I do like the theme...

Keep on writing!

-Lioness

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

3 posted 2003-05-31 09:10 PM

Hey girl! This was really good! ~Jess

"If a thing is worth doing at all, it is worth doing badly." -Gustav Holst

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2003-06-03 01:08 PM

Welcome to PIP!

This poem was a great first post, letting the readers get to know you as well. This poem actually reminded me a lot of the song "Bitch". Very nice poem. Again, welcome... and I hope I read more from you soon!

--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

5 posted 2003-06-04 11:54 AM

hey, It reminded me of that song too...I like how you've written this, like a letter to your parents. I wrote one that's kinda similar to that. The meter was a little off, but other than that, nice poem.
::Jen::

Every oak tree started out as a couple of nuts who stood their
ground. --Anonymous

AlostHeart
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.

6 posted 2003-06-04 12:00 PM

Good write i wrote a opoem that was like a letter to my father.. sorry to say my mom sent it to him. i think it made him wake up. he lives like 20 hours away from me and doesnt know how to use a phone. well good job!

~Tori Louise~

Dont ever love a guy that will never love you back, no matter how hard you try.

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