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devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2003-05-29 08:38 PM

Free falling
Please nobody catch me
I knew that this would happen sometime
Once you reach the pinnacle
You can only plummet
Free falling
Plunging to the ice cold pavement
Will I crash and burn
Or bounce back........

[This message has been edited by devinechild22 (05-29-2003 08:40 PM).]

ESP
Member Elite

since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

1 posted 2003-06-01 10:24 AM

I hope you bounce back...this is a neat little piece, very short but says it all. Clever clever!!
Luv, Liz xx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

2 posted 2003-06-10 06:30 PM

hey,
this was really good!
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

3 posted 2003-06-11 03:18 PM

Thanks for the replies. I`m thinkin of movin to a new section because no one replies to the old members anymore. Like everyone is new here now so it`s kinda weird..yea..Thanks again.
*Allison*

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

4 posted 2003-06-15 09:34 PM

Hi. I know what you mean with all the new comers. Personally, I think they are a bit selfish OR something. I don't like being rude, so I don't know what's up with them. They gotta learn to reply to OTHERS...Anyway, I liked your poem. It's was awesome how you made it seem that it didn't really matter if you crashed and burned but then at the end you said "Or bounce back" they made it seem like you wanna try to fix things. I liked it a lot. What I tried to describe came out completely wrong. I can't put it into words what I was trying to say, I hope you can figure it...You think you could read some of my stuff? I posted a lot of stuff, but no one rarely replies...It upsets me because then it makes me feel like mine aren't good enough..could you try to get around to it? Only if you want to. I liked your poem, though. A lot. It was cool. Peace! ~*Kirah*~

"Life is not measured by the moments we take,but by the moments that take our breaths away." -Author Unkown.

NickTofteland
Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 74
MN, USA

5 posted 2003-06-15 10:18 PM

Nice write.

I agree, there was almost a mysterious feeling whilst reading the poem trying to figure out which road you wished to travel... falling or bouncing. Thank for sharing.

Psalms 20:7 "Some trust in chariots and some in horses, but we trust in the name of the Lord our God."

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

6 posted 2003-06-16 01:13 PM

Thanks for the replies...
Wind Song-I understand what you mean...I think you said it like everyone thinks it but doesn`t want to say it aloud..lol You are a wonderful writer..No need to stress if they arent good enough. Thanks again

*Allison*

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