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Room for Tears |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
I just want to go in my room, But piles of clothes block the door. I just want to be warm, But my mangled blankets lie on the floor. I just want to sit and cry, But my tissues are too far away. I just want to lie on my bed, But my large cat is in the way. I just want to cross my room Without stepping on CD’s. I just want to open my window, But I don’t want to feel the breeze. With all I have and all I want and all I’ve ever gotten, Of course I’m happy, but I pass that by And the fortune is forgotten. Even when the sun is shining After a plentiful rain, I only look down at the wetness, And still I must complain. Yes, I’m lucky, compared to others, But I’ve learned over the years, Behind the objects of happiness There is always room for tears. "Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives" |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
I can't even begin to describe how much I liked this poem. This whole thing is beautiful from the first word to the last! I ABSOLUTELY loved this. Wonderful write. It flowed so beautifully, the beat, everything was perfect! I really liked how you said "I just want to open the window, but I don't want to feel the breeze," and things like that, I REALLY liked how you did that. The whole thing, in my opinion, was perfect! Beautiful...absolutely love it. I think this is one of the best poems I've read in a long time. Thank you so much for posting this! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
OMG OMG O...M...G...! I absolutely LOVE this poem! Hunnie, you did and EXCELLENT job! *claps* Great job! ~J.Lynn  "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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xxshadowxx Junior Member
since 2003-05-17
Posts 43Texas |
That was a freakin awsome poem I LOVED IT great job!!!!!!!!!!!! ~Carrie~ "Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me" |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I don't know what else is left to be said of this poem. It is truely the most real description of life I've ever read. Everyone always tells you to cheer up, because there are others worse off than you, but we all get down sometimes, you just have to wait it out. THere is always room for tears. Too strong to give up, to weak to move on.... |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
This is so awesome I don't even know what to say about it, just that this is one of the best descriptions of life I've ever heard. Thank you for the read. Jenni There are three kinds of people in this world, those who can count, and those who can't. |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
wow, thank you guys...  ...i really didn't expect to get such great replies...  ... like three nights ago i just walked into my room, and was suppose to go to bed or do homework or something, but i just felt like sitting and crying, but i realized nothing was really wrong... except for all the little things... and so the only thing that i really wanted to do was write... and so i grabbed my notebook and just jotted down some words from looking around my room... anyways, thanks a bunch "Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives" |
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