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*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

0 posted 2003-05-17 02:13 AM

What is it about the silence of the night that seems to awaken the spirit of the mind? Here's another what do you think?

The frost clings thickly
to the leaves
early on this autumn eve.

I feel the crunch
beneath my feet
of fresh-fell snow
in the street.

Exhale freezes
to my face
encrusting mustache
with tinseled lace.

Brisk the air
that I draw in,
as cold the wind
upon my chin.

I stand agape
at winter nigh,
the cumulus billowing
in the sky.

Foul- the weather,
as foul my mood;
my steps are brisk;
my manner crude.

They mirror the state
of my mind
in sorting falsehoods
left behind.

The night is chill,
--as now are you,
and I've been with
someone new.

You have left
what eyes can’t see;
From the start
you’ve injured me.

Yet,
I have learned
a great deal
about discerning
what is real.

Love is,
as I have learned,
too easily given-
too soon spurned.

I think never
will be a day
I am sure
my love will stay.

Nor, I guess,
will ever be
that he will totally
trust in me;

but if he passes
the test of time
and mellows my heart
like verse in rhyme,

when cold winds blow
from east to west
the sun will glow
within my chest,

and like new buds
still white with frost
bathed in rays
while gently tossed,

I will love -
a love anew
and hope new hope
that he will too.

For varied winds
blow in life
but warm embraces
put end to strife

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2003-05-17 03:47 PM

That is really good Bella! Life has a way of bringing about the best. Keep writing!

~Elizabeth

Waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you..
~Mr. Big

snoduck
Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

2 posted 2003-05-17 04:15 PM

That's really truly a great piece of writing. I loved the imagery.

This was probably my favorite part:

"You have left
what eyes can’t see;
From the start
you’ve injured me."

I know how you feel... LOVE STINKS

-Erica-

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2003-05-18 11:09 PM

Thanks for the replys guys! This was a poem kind of about how love stinks but also about how the human heart can overcome it's pain with time or at least ease it enough to venture out into the world of hope and faith and romance once again. Anyways thanks again for the comments they are always welcome!
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

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