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Ree Ree
Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 56
providence, RI

0 posted 2003-05-11 05:26 PM

i'm not trying to be stupid.
and i'm sorry,
really.
But these aren't choices.
THey're not that conscious,
really.
i'm just
doing what seems right.
i just want to be happy.
and it's hard sometimes.
apparently nothing's what it seems.
You'd think i'd learn not to trust,
after all this,
not to rely on what i feel.
You'd think a girl like me
would learn.
:sad smile:
i know what it looks like
to you.
but i'm not naive,
I'm Not!
i just don't care.
I know what's going on.
i understand
and i know i don't deserve this,
but it's not punishment.
it's just my life,
the way things are,
so i just don't care;
i don't know why.
It doesn't matter,
really.
It might
but
to who?
I don't care,
really.
Neither does anyone else.
Sometimes i wish they would,
maybe they should.
The point it they don't.
so i just don't care.
because there's still this goal.
because i'm kind-of willing to be hurt,
for a chance at happiness.
I'm just looking for the good,
because there's so much bad already.
Maybe that's wrong,
but i don't think so.
I'm not trying to find the bad things,
but they still, somehow, find me.

snoduck
Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

1 posted 2003-05-11 05:41 PM

hmm sounds like my life. just keep your head up and remember that (1) boys are idiots no offense to anyone who reads this. and (2) you can never know when stuff goes bad! get better

-Erica-

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-05-11 05:49 PM

Good one. I couldn't stop reading it. The short, choppy lines were kinda distracting though. Other than that, good job.
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2003-05-12 01:29 AM

I liked the poem overall let me tell you I can relate..I just wrote one a few days ago actually called hopeless time that expressed how much I'm at that point of not caring and yet some how I still seem to!..grr..frusterating isn't it! One thing I would say as a suggestion is the repetitve use of "really" I can see were you are trying to make a point but it is a little distracting. But It's just a suggestion if you like the point that the use of the word is making than don't mind me! Enjoyable read.
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

Danielle
Member

since 1999-12-01

Posts 80
Providence, RI, USA

4 posted 2003-05-19 08:25 PM

I loved it. I think it's one of the best poems you have posted. And remember...don't let the bad bring you down...let the good keep you up.

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