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dani Junior Member
since 2003-05-10
Posts 46 |
you put on an act pretend to be hard i know really you're afraid to let down you're gaurd you say that you love him and can't be without i know really yuo're obbsessed to devout he's yuor religion your reason to shine i know he don't like you he's not trapped in your mind you can't controll him the way that you want he is a free spirit but that's not your fault your unreasnoble your way is not right i know that your bossy but yuo won't win this fight i used to like you admire in a way now i've come to hate you, you thin k i'm your prey you didn't count on me being like you i will put up a fight and i will win too dear misstress uggell hear what i say learn to get on with yur life, to live another day i'll live a lie until i die or until you work out why |
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Blink_Blood New Member
since 2003-05-17
Posts 2England |
you have no right to write about me Dani. You know how upset that poem got me last time,You have no right to do that. -X-x- Blink Blood -x-X- |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
i probably shouldn't get in the middle of this but i'd just like to say ... i believe anyone has the right to write about anything they want... posting it publically is different... but i think anyone is allowed to write what they want for themselves and get their feelings out. "Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives" |
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Blink_Blood New Member
since 2003-05-17
Posts 2England |
No you shouldnt get in the middle of it at all. -X-x- Blink Blood -x-X- |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
The meter is good in this, I think. Interesting style, which works well. I won't comment any further than the actual poetry as I think that would do more harm than good. Thanks for the read. Luv, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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