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FlyingCloud
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since 2003-04-28
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A little place inside my head

0 posted 2003-05-05 06:30 PM


There, in a valley of green it lies,
Forever frozen in its solemn pose,
Surrounded by sadness, dark ties,
There it stands, the somber rose.

Its petals are blacker than ebony,
Its leaves, not green are those,
Weighted down by pensive memory,
There it is, the somber rose.

I happened upon it, in my voyage,
Alone, solitary, in the frigid snows,
Its moody head, a thinker's age,
Barely visible, the somber rose.

And so that lowly, mournful, flower,
Inspired me to write this prose,
In the middle of the afternoon hour,
A little thing, the Somber Rose.


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I wrote this on the one year anniversary of my father's death. It has been one tough year.

"A relationship is like a rose, How long it lasts, no one knows; Love can erase an awful past, Love can be yours, you'll see at last; To feel that love, it makes you sigh, To have it leave, you'd rather die; You hope you've found that special rose, 'Cause you love and care for the one you chose."
-Rob Cella

[This message has been edited by FlyingCloud (05-05-2003 06:37 PM).]

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SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
1 posted 2003-05-05 09:00 PM


This is a very beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading it. You had a beautiful choice of words. Nice job.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
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In The Clouds
2 posted 2003-05-05 11:25 PM


this is one of the most beautiful things i have EVER read. This is a wonderful peice and I'm sorry about your dad. hugs.
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

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Sparks, NV
3 posted 2003-05-05 11:40 PM


wow amazing poem i really loved it. and i'm sorry to hear about your dad.
robin

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cody saw some pigs so he tried to fly but he fell and went BOOM!

blueyedlioness
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
USA
4 posted 2003-05-06 01:50 PM


I loved that... really nice job of making every other line rhyme. That's hard to do. You could've gotten that into the book - awesome job.
blackandwhitehorizon
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since 2003-05-05
Posts 183
an akward state of mind
5 posted 2003-05-07 08:11 PM


that is a truly great poem...
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