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punkrockerrobin
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0 posted 2003-04-26 11:05 AM


i try to live my life day by day,
but something always gets in my way.
no one seems to notice,
that's cus there not aware.
so they just sit and stare.

life has got me by the throat.
tighter and tighter it's grip gets.
i try to break free,
but no one knows,
so they can't help me.

if only i could make them see.
how mean life can be.
it's grip gets tighter with each struggle.
i think i'm losing the battle.

it's grip is loosening and i can breathe.
this can't be!
it's a trick!
am i still alive?
is it true, did i win?
is the battle done?

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

for only time can tell when the grip will tighten.
so i go on with my life day by day.
till something else gets in my way.

And something has.
so the grip once again.......
tightens.

but yet again i have overcome
i have strenth once again
and life ain't stoppin me!

so you want me
COME AND GET ME!
i won't back down!!
neither shall any of you!
be strong and stand your ground!

i am who i am and that's all that i am and all i shall ever be and if you don't like who i am then leave!

© Copyright 2003 Robin Hill - All Rights Reserved
loucille
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1 posted 2003-04-26 12:26 PM


I really liked this. It shows that sometimes you do get what you want. Very uplifting.
x

"On a hot summer night, would you offer your throat to the wolf with the red roses?"

Jeremy Halstead
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2 posted 2003-04-26 02:37 PM


keep fightin' the good fight...nice work.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

blueyedlioness
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3 posted 2003-04-26 03:13 PM


First of all, I wanna say I really liked the basic idea of it.

The first sentence bothers me a bit, though:

"I try to live my life day by day"

In my opinion, it would flow better as

"I try to live life day by day"

But yep, that's just me. And I did really like the rest of it!

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4 posted 2003-04-26 04:00 PM


YAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!  

  I needed that.  People are so full of themselves anymore and if you give em an inch they'll try for a foot.  I liked this.

I vote.

ex animo,
Aaron

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

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5 posted 2003-04-26 07:34 PM


thank ya peoples for the great comments!! yall rawk my sawks! lol.....
robin

i am who i am and that's all that i am and all i shall ever be and if you don't like who i am then leave!

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6 posted 2003-04-26 08:53 PM


BOOYAH!!!
sing'n fool
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7 posted 2003-04-28 03:22 AM


Now that is a good poem, and oh so true.  When life grabs you by the horns (or throat in this case) all you can do is grab right back.  Good job!

Sing'n Fool

Be yourself.  Say what you feel.  Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

[This message has been edited by sing'n fool (04-28-2003 03:23 AM).]

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8 posted 2003-04-28 03:26 AM


BOOYAH BACK TO YA SIS! LOL!!!

mike- yea just gotta learn to not give up and not let go! after all i been through ain't now way i am backin down! i'm a tuff little girl! (i say little cus i'm only 4'9) lol!!

i am who i am and that's all that i am and all i shall ever be and if you don't like who i am then leave!

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