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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Trickling down my spine -like disease- And branching off from the vertebrae... into every other part in my body until every last cell is infected. After this my insides collapse -on top of eachother- Forming a barricade of some kind... which creates internal flood amd traps all this disease inside of me. The only place I can mend is home. Home Is Not In My Room And On My Bed. Home Is Not A Door Mat. Home Is Not A Place Where Family Is. Home Is In His Eyes And In His Arms. And I May Never Get Back |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
I enjoy anything that relates to sadness and bittersweet happiness. I'm funny like that. Ohh well. I liked this. The beginning was a little too morbid for my usual tastes but the more I thought about it, I realized that feelings of sorrow and doubt really are like a diesease. It spreads slowly and unstoppable. The end on the other hand, was perfect. Home. I know the feeling. I hope you find it again. Knowing what you know about this person and how you would feel, and how they would walk away, would you rather not know him? You have my vote, because I enjoy dealing with raw emotions. ex animo, Aaron IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI [This message has been edited by aaron woodside (04-11-2003 03:36 AM).] |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
ha! you posted another one!! yaaaaaaaaaay!! i luved this it's deeeep maaan... this was awesome it better make it to the book 2!! "sometimes i just feel like |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK |
 Nice one. I liked the way you compared the feeling of emotional homelessness to disease. The ending was unexpected, which made a nice change. You got my vote!Ellie  I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged! |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
i usually like when u repeat lines so i really liked this one good job man "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sarah, being away from home is indeed a nauseating feeling, I have had this disease time and time again and only love can be chicken broth! (sigh) This is a very wonderfully descriptive piece, sweet friend, we all loe you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sarah, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Very good you sure got my vote Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
This was WONDERFUL! You had excellent imagery! This was most definetly a pleasure to read! You have my vote! Excellent write, absolutely love! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Thank you everyone!  I'm glad you all liked it!~Sara [This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (04-21-2003 02:31 PM).] |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Sara- I just came back here and I searched for all of your poems and I looked at this one and almost beat myself for not replying. I'm such a dildo. We haven't talked in forever. This was an awesome write. I'm off to read some more! *Allison* "Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland." |
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