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Teen Poetry #6

A madman types...

LuckyFelix
Junior Member

since 2003-01-17

Posts 34
Here.

0 posted 2003-04-07 03:20 PM

Light shadows
dance in their stillness,
as the order of chaos
reings with no power.

A deadly innocence
with naive sophistication,
quietly shouts
as its blinded with sight.

Mending seperation,
exsists without being.
And coils, unwound...
eternally timeless.

Presevred decay,
loved in hatred.
Proving, without a point...
eveything is nothing.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2003-04-07 04:08 PM

first to reply haha. i liked this, very much so. the imagery was great. and ur choice of vocabulary is great to lol. anywho, great job. byebye~

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

2 posted 2003-04-07 09:11 PM

Good write, seriously! I wish I could write like you! Don't stop writing or I'll just have to..hurt you.haha. ~Jess

"Poetry, she thought, wasn't written to be analyzed; it was meant to inspire without reason, to touch without understanding." -Nicholas Sparks

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-04-08 07:01 PM

I like the word choices here.
I think I like the last 2 lines of the first stanza best.
Great job.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

4 posted 2003-04-09 04:06 PM

Besides being an absolutely beautiful poem, this was also very intelligently written. I absolutely love the contradiction of every single line. I'll admit I didn't catch it the first time through, but at the end I felt like I'd almost just been fooled somehow. So I reread it and had to laugh at myself for not catching the paradox. Awesome job here
Kay

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

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