need help to decide a title read and tell me what you think it should be.

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Teen Poetry #6

need help to decide a title read and tell me what you think it should be.

NeverSayDie
Junior Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 39
Duluth, MN & Grand Forks ND

0 posted 2003-04-07 01:09 AM

This town is like a prison
But one thats well diguised

Its the hell where you wear mittens
And snow falls from the sky

Each day is like the last
And nothing will ever change

So that is why i'm breaking free
My life would end without a change

The people here are shallow
They stare with empty eyes

I try to understand them
I try to show them love

The drugs have stopped working
My mind is new and clear

And with this strange awakening
Comes all that I do fear

My trust has been broken
My patience has been tested

Being let down hurt
Especailly when its a friend

And now I know the route to take
To leave it all behind.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-04-07 09:35 AM

A good title for this poem maybe 'Ghost Town.' Just thought it might be a suggestion. Anyways, I like this one. ~Jess

"Poetry, she thought, wasn't written to be analyzed; it was meant to inspire without reason, to touch without understanding." -Nicholas Sparks

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

2 posted 2003-04-07 09:49 AM

Superb.. hits me close to home too..

i'll spit out a few good ideas for titles..

how about:

Falling Tears of Ice

-or-

Clouds of Gray

.. hmm.. well Ghost Town sounds pretty good too.. good luck figuring it out

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

3 posted 2003-04-07 09:54 AM

good poem, sorry I can't help ya with a title.
Jen

You are what you make yourself to be.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2003-04-08 07:09 PM

I like this one alot,
It really paints a picture.
How bout "Clear Decision" for a title?

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

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