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apsara
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0 posted 2003-04-06 08:42 AM


Short Swans

Shatter the mirrors that screen us
That taunt us with their flaws and lies
We are our own and that’s the only thing that matter to us
We are the new breed of ugly ducklings
Who never turn into your graceful swans.


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peachesNcream
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1 posted 2003-04-06 05:38 PM


Good poem. Short, sweet, and to the point! ~Jess

"Poetry, she thought, wasn't written to be analyzed; it was meant to inspire without reason, to touch without understanding." -Nicholas Sparks

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon
2 posted 2003-04-06 07:28 PM


I think ugly ducklings are cute actually.
WinterWren
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3 posted 2003-04-06 09:37 PM


I really like this one, my vote definitly!
Great Job!

WinterWren
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BrokenDreams
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In The Clouds
4 posted 2003-04-06 10:26 PM


there should be more free-spirited "ugly ducklings" in this world. good write.
Jenni

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Kandi
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North of Hell
5 posted 2003-04-06 10:46 PM


Wow...so much is said in those few lines. I thought this was beautiful. It takes such a talent to get your point across so perfectly and so briefly. Well done - count on my vote.

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6 posted 2003-04-07 07:49 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Don't forget that the ugly duckling had his day too, we are all beautiful deep inside and from the outside is not how we must distinguish each other but through understanding! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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