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Not your kind of guy |
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X Q poet Junior Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 47 |
This is a poem that I dug out... It's on my webpage too... I've considered left and right, conclusion have I found I've given much, taken more, and firmly stood my ground I will not shed a tear today, in sadness though I stand I turn my face to borders, prepare to leave the land I've broken many promises, I'm sorry that I did I blame it on myself and all the tension that I hid I celebrate the madness, you turn and give me grace Though still I see the weariness, painted on your face I bow and graciously depart, I wave my last farewell And hoping it will not be you, condemning me to hell... And once again, you kind boys and girls!  Hammer me down with your harsh critiques! |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Harsh critiques... I don't think I have any of those, at least not for this poem. I really liked this, it flowed very well and the rhyming was right on. I enjoyed it! - Cody - |
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AJMGW Member
since 2002-11-19
Posts 57Galaxy Roller Rink |
I really like it to. It flows and it shows what you mean. not just saying it. ^*~AJMGW~*^ |
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SilentFreija Junior Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 37 |
OOOHHHH...That had to be the best poem I've read today! I loved it! It'll always be stuck in my head. =] I'm looking forward to more poetry from ya. Where you look for broken hearts...you'll find me... |
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