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Teen Poetry #6

goblet of failure

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-03-28 10:40 PM

The tast of failure, I know it best,
its that bitter sensation in the back of my mouth.
Its that aching reality in the back of my mind.
Lost hope, I know the feeling best, its that knieve stabbed through my heart,
that jagged point
thats been twisted one too many times.
I don't want to think or feel,
I don't want to be here.
I've had enough!
Some end this cruel game,
let the winners claim their prizes,
and the losers slink away.
Anythings better than the taste of this bitter humilation.
But I drink this cup yet again,
this cup of potent failure and rejection.
Its a lonely walk,
when your going no where but down,
and lonliness is the most familiar thing I've found
So, I cling to nothing and walk my last steps, toward the bottom of low,
I've made it down to the scum, of the ground.
Theres no saving me now,
as I drink these final sips.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (03-28-2003 10:43 PM).]

Tabitha LeAnn
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 50
Kansas, USA

1 posted 2003-03-28 11:09 PM

SUCH A DEEP POEM! I LOVED IT. IT REALLY MADE ME THINK ALOT AND I FELT SO MUCH WHILE READING IT, IT WAS AN EXCELLENT PIECE OF WRITTING!!! LOOK FORWARD TO READING MORE.

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

2 posted 2003-03-29 12:57 PM

I love the simile you used here. Wow! I like it all and I am having a hard time critiquing... Well, at least you know its good.
Great work!!!
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

3 posted 2003-03-29 10:49 AM

awesome poem and I love the title!
Jenn

don't ever let others tell you who you are

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