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Metaphorically Speaking |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
You're as cool as ice, That's been melting under the sun for hours, That's okay, I like my drinks warm. Falling for you? I think not. See, when I drove up your mountain, I tied myself to the car, And this rope's the only thing, That's keeping me from falling over the edge. Oh, are those your scissors? That must be why I feel like I'm sliding off this cliff. I'm as hot as an mid-afternoon, In the middle of February, That's okay, You never liked the summer. "You write the lie you want to be when your life looks like a book you wouldn't read."-Jets To Brazil |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ooo, I do like this, you did good  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I like the ending. I'd echo SEA, but since "good" is an adjective, not an adverb... I'll just say you did well. I sure am a jerk. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LP~ rofl.....hush you face  |
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Jester Junior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 41The dark corners of your mind |
This was very nicely done. I liked how it made you seem very warm and caring while making the other person seem cold and ruthless. Very nice. I am your God, will you kill me now or shall I be continually suicidal? |
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