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A Woman's Story |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"A Woman's Story" (21/02/03) © 2003 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved She buy groceries everday, and she always do the laundry, Cook for a hungry family, make sure the children bathe daily Tough but someone has to bother, just go that little bit farther, After the loss of their father, all though it's kinda hard on her. She ain't never been on wellfair, rather work two jobs she don't care, Whatever's been said it's not rare, can't have holes in the clothes they wear. She's a strong woman, a giving woman, A do things outta love woman. She's a good woman, an honest woman, A geener grass seein' woman. Drive her kids to theire baseball games, let them learn what real life contains, Rent films, makes porpcorn on fridays, just smile when the carpet gets stained. She bought her youngest a new bike, her oldest got a car in the drive, She tries to give with all her might, hear them say luv ya's worth the fight. Her quit time's her personal time, she read a book to ease her mind, And lays the long hard day behind, but she'd never ever rewind. She's a warm woman, a witty woman, A heart of solid gold woman. She's a calm woman, a promised woman, A knowing what to say woman. She is looking back upon her life, knowing she never gave up the fight, Ain't been a prouder tear from her eye. She did her job well raising her kids, she's feeling emotionaly rich, Though her heart's blown it's very last kiss. She's the lords woman, an angel woman From heaven looking down woman... God Bless her. |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
good job...sounds like my mom. " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Brian, this is beautiful, sweet friend, it is sad for her to cope with her loss but I know how she loves her children and because of her they will grow and become golden-hearted like her! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is so great, but you might want to look it over for some spelling mistakes...this coming from a woman that keeps a dictionary beside her at all times..lol well, almost all times  |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Wonderful!! It reminds me of the way that my mom was! There a a few spelling mistakes but other than that I don't see anything wrong with the piece, it is emotional and heartfelt and definitly has my vote! Enjoyable read. ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. ~Bella~ [This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (02-23-2003 01:54 AM).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is a wonderful dedication.  Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
It's so heartfelt, and touching. You've got my vote. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Heartwarming indeed, and you get a chance to fix mistakes before it goes into the book as well by the way. |
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rimmie Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 45Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
WOW! Sound like an amazing person! keep up the great job! ~RuZ~  |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Another great poem for the book I have read here. It is a wonderful dedication to women.  Dawn |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
Thanks everyone for voting & replying to this one. Got inspired by my own mother and began thinking back to when I was around ten years old. Before my step dad came into the picture. She really worked her ass off for us. and thought I'd writing something for her. Also did a re-spelling of as much as I could, anyone know where to post it? Gonna throw it on her for the moment, but please do speak up if you see something I missed! thanks. A Woman's Story" (21/02/03) © 2003 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved She buy groceries everday, And she always do the laundry, Cook for a hungry family, Make sure the children bathe daily. Because someone has to bother, Just go that little bit farther, After the loss of their father, All though it's kind of hard on her. She have never been on welfare, Rather work two jobs she don't care, Whatever's been said it's not rare, Can't have holes in the clothes they wear. She's a strong woman, a giving woman, A do things outta love woman. She's a good woman, an honest woman, A geener grass seein' woman. Drive her kids to their baseball games, Let them learn what real life contains, Rent films, makes popcorn on fridays, Just smile when the carpet gets stains. She bought her youngest a new bike, Her oldest got a car in the drive, She is giving with all her might, Hear them say love you is worth the fight. Her quiet time's her personal time, She read a book to ease her mind, And lays the long hard day behind, Nut she'd never ever rewind. She's a warm woman, a witty woman, A heart of solid gold woman. She's a calm woman, a promised woman, A knowing what to say woman. She is looking back upon her life, Knowing she never gave up the fight, Haven't been a prouder tear from her eye. She did her job well raising her kids, She's feeling emotionaly rich, Even God knows all the pieces fit. She's the lords woman, an angel woman From heaven looking down woman... God Bless her. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Vote in ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You'll have a chance to do an edit, Brian, if this makes the rounds. Good job...nothing like dedicating a poem to your mom! Hugs... |
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Echo Junior Member
since 2003-02-20
Posts 14the abyss |
in one of my classes, the monolouges about single moms are always so sad. Its nice to see a rather proud one finnally. eyes see, ears hear, mind believes |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
Great and sweet poem! I loved it! Got my vote for sure! XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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pearl6884 Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 72California coast |
Sometimes mothers just wish they could be a child again...Hopefully, yours found the way to do that. Thank you! *applause* *To see the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower...Hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour...* |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
i love this!!! its got my vote! ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
A great poem for a beautiful mom! When you think you have heard it all, |
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SweetGhettoFlurt Junior Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 15Milw,WI |
This poem wuz really great. I dont know why but it really got to me. I really liked the part about how she would do anything just to hear an i love you. |
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