Teen Poetry #6 |
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Lonliness |
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rimmie Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 45Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Zingzaging between the dimly lit streets With the light of the moon being my only real guide Turning from one street to the next amelesly half the time not even realizing where I am My eyes planted firmly on the ground before me Hopping only for one thing That you will be waiting around the next corner Yet at every turn I am welcomed by the same image of the dark deserted street before me [This message has been edited by rimmie (02-14-2003 04:46 PM).] |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Aww!!!! whats up with you? Are you alright? *hugs* hang in there hun, Im here for you. And as for the poem---great stuff! ![]() |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
loved the way you wrote this rimma. but see, youre wrong. you're not alone. ![]() Congratulations! It's a bisexual! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Good poem! Very heartfelt. The end is so sad, wow. Great job and well done! WinterWren |
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rimmie Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 45Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Thanx a lot 'yall! ![]() |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I enjeyed the poem a lot, it was short but it didn't lack image(i love images) anyways. It also had a very foreboding touch..dont know if u meant it, but that's what i saw good work Regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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Android 17![]() ![]()
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Short, simple---yet deep, and sweet. *crosses arms* I liked it! Vekrdehk fyc dra uhmo drehk E fyc kuut yd...pid, yd maycd E ymfyoc vuikrd vun fryd E pameajat eh... |
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rimmie Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 45Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Geee! thank you! im really glad you liked it and Regina that was what i was trying to do and im very happy you saw that. ![]() ![]() [This message has been edited by rimmie (02-16-2003 09:38 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Rimmie~ I really like this. I enjoyed the short and 'to the point' nature of it. Nicely done. ![]() ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Android 17![]() ![]()
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
I think Vicky just beat the pants offa all of us again! ^_^ Vekrdehk fyc dra uhmo drehk E fyc kuut yd...pid, yd maycd E ymfyoc vuikrd vun fryd E pameajat eh... |
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