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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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Dedicated to someone special: brushing my cheek against the wall laying asleeping thinking about you dreams, only that could wake from the storm to perfect to resist you know me almost to well in times to short to even explain making me think, i am truly special but you lied and everyone can tell to tender to adore more than once, so i know, that we are all beautiful one wish falling on the star like the old rhyme that would never work until now making a list what you taught me listed one through infinity to be myself is number one but also to listen, and respect giving me confidence, i could only wish while laying out in the cold not to judge by the outside you taught me that without even knowing it because you showed me over and over funny thing is, you knew with pen and ink i draw us a picture of more than a waterslide blue and green going together mixing and blending through each slope the message you shan't recive now you take my hand into yours lessons through for now a sense of hope holds us in its arms like you hold me in your grasp, safe again but you don't.... Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... [This message has been edited by Riley (02-08-2003 05:46 PM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Aww, thank you so much Ri! What a nice poem to dedicate to me.  Heh, seriously though... very sweet, I love the surreal imagery, how you start with an image of laying in bed, and then take your poem in the direction of a dreamlike state. Really held my interest from start to finish, I fully enjoyed reading this... Especially like the ending. Like you just snap yourself away from the dream in a single line. Very well done Ri, this is great poetry. See you around, babe.  Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i have no idea what the challenge was, ill go look. but this was an extermly well written piece. the whole picture was completed and very vivid in my mind, but to everyone it will be different and will perhaps remind them of someone in their life, past, or present. great work regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Great job. I`ve read a lot of your stuff and you are a great writer. Keep it up! *Allison* "I`ll be your crying shoulder |
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