Teen Poetry #6 |
Gone to Seattle |
Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
So this is it. You've left. I eat my leftover rice and pretend I don't care. Puddle of Mud is playing but it's not loud enough so I turn it up. It's kinda funny how Reena and I have deep conversations over MSN and when I'm at her place we talk superficially. I look mournfully at my cup; can't fill it up cause all my juice is gone. There... Reena feels better. Now what about me? "Will you be okay?" When am I ever NOT okay, Sarah? She looks at me and I know that I'm stronger than this and maybe this time I'll let myself cry when I need to. So I go real quiet and just about choke on the anguish that threatens to overwhelm me... And I realise that no, I won't cry this time, either. |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
seriously emotional, You bring a passion to your poetry. It was good, good detail. Nice job "I'm stronger than this and maybe this time I'll let myself cry when I need to. So I go real quiet and just about choke on the anguish that threatens to overwhelm me... And I realise that no, I won't cry this time, either." " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
*smile* I know how that feels. *smooches* Another wonderful poem. My muse died. *pokes limp muse* Yep. Its dead. lol... Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I hope you're okay Rhonda. You can sit there and forgive someone until the cows come home, and it won't make a bit of difference until they forgive themselves. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
*hugs* |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Gone to seattle... Seattles boring. Sorry. This poem was good, It had a lot of pain in it, though, hope you're okay... I liked it. Hope things work out! - Cody - |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sounds like CwboyAtHeart needs to move...just kidding. And Rhonda, sorry, but i'd have cried. Excellent write. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Not being able to feel much emotional pain, I know what that's about---you know I can relate, and am here! Hmmm...I like your style of writing, it's not quite a poem...and not quite prose---it's like Funker Vogt---the happy median between Techno and Industrial...except, rather than music---you're writing! Keep it up, Raiden! Vekrdehk fyc dra uhmo drehk E fyc kuut yd...pid, yd maycd E ymfyoc vuikrd vun fryd E pameajat eh... |
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