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Teen Poetry #6

Snowflake

Trouble Breathing
Member

since 2002-11-12

Posts 63

0 posted 2003-01-23 06:06 PM

A hint of winter,
Is floating through the air
Outside it’s become a bit chilly,
But for once I can’t be bothered to care

Snowflakes are dissolving at mid-fall,
Makes me wonder if it means anything at all,
But the sky outside is glowing,
And the clouds in the sky keep the rain drops from falling

You can try as you might,
To be something you’re not,
But even the biggest of snowflakes,
Must fall from its flight

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

1 posted 2003-01-23 06:55 PM

this was a kewl winter type poem the only thing wrong maybe was that the rhyming seemed just a lil forced other than that this was really good.

CATHY

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

barbaraj
Member

since 2003-01-24

Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada

2 posted 2003-01-24 09:26 PM

good winter poem(i've seen so few) i thought the rhyming was ok but once or twice the rhythm seemed a bit off. but it was good anyways

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