Teen Poetry #6 |
The Strangest Thing (All right, Vicky, you win) |
Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
It was my eyes... their dark brown depths pulled you in; One glance made you mine although I didn't know it (I was mostly concerned with escaping from class) It was my eyes... their gaze mainly focused out the window; I'd make with you the occasional contact oblivious to your interest (I hooked you the day I walked out of class like that) It is my eyes... the ones who softly gaze upon you now; You say you could look into them forever and who am I to stop you? |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hehehe! I liked this! It was...kinda sweet! Sounds like a romance story! I want more... Hehehe---but seriously...this flowed incredibly smoothly. (Which I thank you for, me being in my current state and all) You know the day's gonna be bad, when you start it off---with Sephiroth at your door, demanding his toaster back... |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
*grin* You write so far beyond me, my dear. ... I just called you "my dear." I really must be going senile. Loss of memory, loopiness, and grandmotherlyness. Yikes. Anyway, you blew me away again. *smile* You never fail. (I love you more) Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Rhonda I liked this alot! It was sweet. and thats what these people need! I liked your Critique message! it was a good laugh. Next time your online and you aint away I might need to talk to you. I just might ya know. ur special. because I can tell u stuff. and now you get to hear my pathetic problems! It must be very fun! LOL Again---the poem was great! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I like this poem alot, especially the end. Good job! by the way, Im curious, what did Vicky win? WinterWren |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Very sweet, very well written, Rhonda. We need to talk soon, my friend. ~Titus "A life unexamined is not worth living." -Socrates [This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (01-20-2003 03:30 PM).] |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
An interesting read |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Alex: do you REALLY want more? Cause now that I've been proven wrong, I'm sure it won't be hard to write more. Kielo: I don't write beyond you, I'm in that little alley way to your left Thanks hun Del: I promise I'll talk to you soon lol. *smiles* Thanks for sayin it's sweet WinterWren: thanks! Vicky and I had an informal, unofficial bet going that I wouldn't be able to last very long without writing a sappy poem. Unfortunately I lost, and I wrote that poem. *sighs* I can see many more coming now that the first one's been written. Ti: Thanks We do need to talk soon. Very soon. Andrew: Thanks I've finally got Will power! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Thanks I can continue with my life now that I know that. WinterWren |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Rhonda~ I'm smiling...not just because I win, but because 'happy' looks good on you. Hugs, ~Vicky P.S. I win!! "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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