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The Nothing
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Jaime
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Nothing causes me Greater ill than that of Nothing, nothing: The cloud I searched in your America, I searched In your novocain Left a scar, but The tip (time skip) I could not find Villain:nothing This nothing, I have No spies My knight is lazy, Fat and hairy – The nothing he says He will not fight Nothing:nameless The nothing – Impaled us all Nothing, the nothing – Makes demons Of us all Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe. |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
wow girl this is awesome! robin you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Memina, this is by far one of your best pieces of poetry is some time. It's stunning (if a piece of poetry can be described as stunning? lol)... this would've been a knockout at the coffee lounge/bar thing.  I hope... I hope a lot of things. Daniel "A life unexamined is not worth living." |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
By the way... I see you finally took the time to upload a picture.  A great cut/slip from another piece. You look great, memina. Daniel |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
OooOoO!!  This is superbly written, Jaime. quote: I don't know why but this part struck me the most. I'm going to agree with Ti here and say that this is one of your best pieces. Nothing can be taken in so many contexts... Once again, wonderful. I love it. ~AF~ Don't steal - the Government hates competition. |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
this is very sentimental and shows individuality good job good write |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hmm...as always, your poems are confusing...yet understandable. hooray for contradictions! i don't know if i would say it's your best, but it's definetely not garbage. i also enjoyed the fat lazy knight thing. that's about all i can think of, keep writing cuz i like your stuff. -bergundy- "crack my head open, on your kitchen floor. to prove to you, that i have brains." -Alkaline Trio |
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Ephraim Junior Member
since 2002-12-07
Posts 24 |
Does this have polticial and social implications, Jaime? That's what I get from reading it. Reminds me of a certain female singer, the feel of the poem, but I can't bring her name to mind. Well written, well read, enjoyed. Ephraim |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
"Nothing, the nothing – Makes demons Of us all" good job i liked it alot " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Jaime
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Do you want it to be political or social? Really, it's in your hands now. Thanks for reading. - Jaime Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe. |
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barbaraj Member
since 2003-01-24
Posts 139Nova Scotia, Canada |
great poem. nothing else i can say will do it justice |
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smurf_gurl Junior Member
since 2003-01-20
Posts 19US of A |
This is a wonderful poem, great job there were a few parts I didn't understand, but I'm going to go read it again and see if I really am just a blonde with brown hair great job though hun, look forward to reading more ~Stace Boredom is killing me... |
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