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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
This is actually a poem that I wrote about 2 years ago, but I thought it still applied.  Sometimes it's just interesting to go back into the old journals. I spoke to you of things like courage, endurance, and honesty, of common souls and young minds that pretend to be so grown, so all-knowing of all things. You said to me, "Why can't you paint and write of happy things?" I gave you a little smirk and twirled my hair around my finger "I refuse to make a masquerade of things that are meant for honest self-expression" But what you don't know is that if my soul could be painted or written in complete confidence, it'd scare you "you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A. [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (09-26-2002 08:17 PM).] |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I know. I've written some "happy" stuff, and to me it sounds trite and almost silly. I prefer my more contemplative pieces. Well spoken, Jaime. Loved that last line!  --Beth Howl at the stars, whisper when you're sleeping, I'll be there to hold you, I'll be there to stop the chills and all the weeping. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Well I would love to see the things inside, Jaime. The truth is always a very scary thing especially if we're not used to it. Despite the fact it's 2 years old, it still reads very well and has an interesting feel to it. I'm impressed.  ~AF~ "It is far more difficult to murder a phantom than a reality." - Virginia Woolf |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
confindence is refreshing, not scary...eor |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Hmm... you missed my point. "you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Your soul already scares me, Jaime.  I've seen your homepage!  Just kidding, of course... I like this poem, it's relatable... when I was very young, my mother was terrified for my life when she found some of my "meaning of life" poetry. Why can't I write of happy things? 'Cause they're boring and overdone. I prefer to delve deeper, to see the truth of things. And indeed, if one could paint the image of even the very world in complete confidence, it would be terrifying. For most, it is the masquerade that gives us any will to live. Well done. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
this is a great poem jaime. absolutely amazing. i mean, you've obviously grown as a writer a great deal, but you're always had that flare. we envy eachother!! heh. ::gets a little too giddy:: anywas, i thought this should definitely be bumped. it's worth it. oh and a side note. i saw the bottle of hair dye in your room, and i realised we use the same brand. heh. i think it may be same colour as well [pimpin' purple]. i bought it at 'out of the blue' [a nice little 'boutique'], so i'm wondering where you got yours. excellent job m'dear. and i DID email you!! love ya. /jen/ to give pleasure to a single heart by a single act is better than a thousand heads bowing in prayer. [ghandi] [This message has been edited by quietlydying (10-21-2002 06:57 PM).] |
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clumsy Member
since 2002-10-10
Posts 106canada. |
I gave you a little smirk and twirled my hair around my finger "I refuse to make a masquerade of things that are meant for honest self-expression" why can i never say that to people when they ask me that quesion? |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
You did? Hmm.. I haven't gotten it yet. Are you sure it's to the right address? Fuggin' email. Anywho, thanks for replying. I'm always curious as to what you think of my poetry. I typically hate it. I'd burn it if it wasn't like a photograph of me in time. Some people say I'm too self-critical. Hm... no way. Thanks, everybody - you're all swell. Sanity is in itself enough to make you insane. |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
I love the message of this poem, all to real, and extremly powerful for me, thanx for sharing. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
 Scary = good! *nods erracticaly*Like jen said, you still have that certain flare...keep it going
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Swell, dear?  Sincerely, Titus "My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems." |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i just resent it. and i found out why it didn't send. why didn't i get an error message though? maybe... ::thinks:: oh, well uncle joe from kansas now has an email from jen in canada. heh. /jen/ what if they gave a war, and nobody came... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done here. I really liked this a lot.  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Dark Enchantress~ I very much enjoyed reading this. It's definately a very well-written piece. Nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (10-25-2002 02:27 AM).] |
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