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Life Won't Break Me
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Life Won't Break Me |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. 
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Life won’t break me I can carry its burdens Though the weight may be unbearable Life won’t break me Problems will stack up But I will trudge on Life won’t break me I will focus on the joys I will spread what I know Life won’t break me I’m stronger than that I can deal with these obstacles Life won’t break me Life is cruel Life is unfair and unkind But life won’t break me |
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Susie Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 36Illinois |
That is so right~no matter what, you can't let life break you.That was a good poem~keep postin and thanx 4 the 3 replies~lol! |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I really think this poem has a lot of potential but for me, the continual repetition of quote: adds so very little to the peice. If you intend to use repetition in this way then it should reinforce your point but it should also add a new dimension to the poem, if you really just want to make the same point then it might be better to reword that same point a different way. All in all though it was a very pleasant read and you make some very good points and observations. Hope to read more of your work  Andrew Cats playing bagpipes and bugles |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
kool. Short but sweet, in a weird way. Life is cruel, but you learn to live with it...I love the way you think. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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