Teen Poetry #6 |
MY LIFE |
ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
Living Life got me worried Never hesitate, decisions are hurried At times right, yet never wrong Moving along, where do i belong Self assurance doesn't exist in me Look and see, don't wanna agree Contradictive in my ways and thoughts Realizing now, i've been distraught Blinded by unforseen circumstances In life not given many chances Haven't capitalized on my chances Still lonely with no romances No longer asking when, what for Can't miss what you've never explored Blessed or cursed is what I inquire A relationship is all I desire Would that fix these feelings, start healing Everything this life's been stealing |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is alright. I think it felt a bit dragged out in a few places. You might be better off to break it into stanzas, than to just leave it all as one big chunk. I think it could be a lot better if only it was more spaced out. I understand, I used to write like this myself, back when I was starting out. It just isn't very appealing visually. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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