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Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

0 posted 2003-01-03 08:31 AM

It's only been a few weeks,
But already it's an eternity without you,
You were the star that radiated my path,
Guiding me through my darkness,
But then you weren't there,

Lost again I search feebly in the smothering night,
Wondering how long before you come back to me,
Even if you still remember who I am,
Who I was,
Or who I want to be for you,

A week,
A year,
Till the end of time,
If you're not with me,
I'm lost in the cold darkness of my mind,

Please never leave me again...

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-01-03 01:20 PM

Yes I believe we are sad romatic types.

I don't think I've ever read a poem of yours that I didn't like, and this one was no exception, very good.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

2 posted 2003-01-03 05:15 PM

And now the third wheel of this trio of sad and pretty-much-hopeless romantics, has arrived!  LOL!  All joking aside, it's rather true, isn't it?  *sigh*  I don't have to think too hard to realize this is about *HER* again...lol.  I guess I'm not much better, being hopelessly in love with *you know who*. Ahh... even though we have no chance, we hold on, ehh?  Oh well.  In all sincerity I liked the poem, but we've come to expect nothing less from the best from you, Bryan.  You're just that good.

                 *~Rich~*

"You can't hurt meee!!  'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

[This message has been edited by HopelessRomanticGuy (01-03-2003 05:17 PM).]

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

3 posted 2003-01-03 05:18 PM

BTW, in case that didn't make sense, this IS the best yet.

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

4 posted 2003-01-03 06:13 PM

this is just lovely. I'm going to put it in my library.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2003-01-03 08:39 PM

LOL! Yeah Rich, you be sad and hopless #1, Bryan will be sad and hopeless #2 and I'll be sad and hopeless #3! LOL!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

6 posted 2003-01-03 09:08 PM

Wow. I can seriously relate to this. It's perfect. It's actually the way I've been feeling for the past week or so. This is great. Can't wait to read more just like it. ~*~Me~*~

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

jennilynn
Junior Member

since 2002-11-11

Posts 29
here with me

7 posted 2003-01-03 10:15 PM

this is really good. we've all felt that way at some point in time.

btw, i'm pretty much a sad, hopless romantic too so don't feel bad.

-jenni-

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

8 posted 2003-01-03 10:23 PM

Wow, that was a great poem... it makes me want to cry. I just broke up with my b/f and I am pretty sure that at this moment your poem would explain how he feels. Anyway, I am not cruel and heartless... and this was a great poem! Keep writing...

Sadly Understanding,
Jeanette

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

9 posted 2003-01-04 07:07 AM

Thanks all of you. I aim to please while sharing a bit of myself with you. Thank you.

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

mindy
Junior Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 34
VA, US

10 posted 2003-01-04 05:04 PM

I love this poem...(myself being hopelessly lost in love)...It shows how desperately devoted you can be to that special someone...but still they leave you inevitably lost...

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

11 posted 2003-01-04 10:50 PM

i guess im not actually hopeless...see, im in love, she realizes how much i love her and realizes how serious and special it can be therefore while in highschool we are going to be just friends, y'know, don't want high school to mess anything up...in the mean time im so freaking in love with her and we're just friends...no to mention, there's no garantee of us being together...lol...yeah, that's my sad story for everyone, nice job btw!

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

12 posted 2003-01-05 12:23 PM

"A week,
A year,
Till the end of time,
If you're not with me,
I'm lost in the cold darkness of my mind"

  strong wordz,good poem

      ###CATHY###

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

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