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Trouble Breathing
Member

since 2002-11-12

Posts 63

0 posted 2003-01-01 12:51 PM

You gave up everything you had,
And it’s quite sad,
When who you want to be,
Isn’t who you are,
You used to act so differently
But now you’re just a nobody to me.
It’s not okay,
To give up everything you used to be,
And it’s not okay
To be overcome by greed,
Because I miss the old days,
Of just you and me,
Just climbing up the tree,
Not a worry in the world,
Could have kept us from each other,
And not a worry in the world,
Could have changed you for another
Yeah, this is my second poem I've posted in the last half hour, and I wrote both of them today.

So, comments? This one is about someone who changes who they are to fit in, or be accepted.

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

1 posted 2003-01-01 12:57 PM

This is a really neat poem . Ever heard of the song Champange Supernova? It too talks about Changing to fit in.. This is an issue that is serious between people. Thank you for exposing that! Have a good day!

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

2 posted 2003-01-01 01:56 PM

I really like that, seems like the kinda thing I'd write only better. I like the rhyme scheme a lot because it never gets old. Nice job. A VERY nice job!

rOxXbabY391
Member

since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

3 posted 2003-01-01 09:08 PM

heyYy this was really good!

I loved these lines~>

Not a worry in the world,
Could have kept us from each other,
And not a worry in the world,
Could have changed you for another

Great poem!!
~*~eMiLy~*~

"I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right."

LTEvans
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
Lenham, England

4 posted 2003-01-02 03:02 AM

I like the poem its pretty good.

Umm, Champagne Supernova?

You mean Oasis?
"Moving slowly down the hall,
Faster than a cannonball,
Where were you while we getting high?"
and so on.
I always thought it was about amphetamines but oh well you learn something new every day!

Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian.

LTEvans

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

5 posted 2003-01-02 10:43 AM

Great poem! I really liked it. I understand what you mean about changing just to fit in, it doesn't matter what other people think..just what you think. Anyway, I am babbling. Love it!

-Jeanette-

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2003-01-02 01:10 PM

Good subject for the poem. And the poem was good for the subject lol. This was a very good one in all seriousness. I liked it alot.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

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