Teen Poetry #6 |
Lyrical Bombs |
Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this is coming at you like a nuclear war lyrical bombs, all out have you noticed this anger is directed at you im sorry that you have to bear the brunt give me something that i wont laugh at! im here to make you cry an eye for an eye insult for an insult are you curious as too why im so angry inside?! this is your one chance that one time when im letting loose bunning and working on a scheme be afraid look at what just hit the ceiling tu pense que je suis la pour toi non! tu me fait mal je vomit sur tes affairs get out of my way do u realize im crying now can you stand up im here with the blindfold heres the gun world war 3 im the jew im the person who will haunt your dreams do u see how sad I am? forgive me? ah, forget that je te vois est ce que tu vois que je suis enrager!? bang your hands on the table start skunking im pissed strumming the bass banging the drums blood booze im just letting it out sigh.. im exhausted too much anger Regina |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
You already know how I feel about this one... Definately a library piece |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I agree with Sky, definitely a library piece! Very well written. Keep 'em coming! (I also had fun trying to translate the French since I just started taking it haha.) *Me* |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
This was incredible! Also heading to my library too. Just... awesome. "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
All that, and I forgot to add it... lol "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
At first, I thought this was gonna be a rap song or something...hahaha. I think this a pretty darn good poem. The French (I think its French) kinda confused me, but that happens all the time. Good read. -Stinky Twinkie doesn't speak French- |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
as emotionally charged as always Regina. You know how to let it rip. I'm lazy and didn't take the time to translate the french, but I liked how you incorportaed it into your poem. Keep posting dear, I'll keep reading. “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Most definately something to keep. Regi, I love your stuff- keep writing woman. Are you scared? BOO! Are you now? |
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Jaime
Registered
MemberPosts 250 |
"are you curious as too why im so angry inside?!" I really liked these lines. I think because the idea of anger inside is a hell of a lot more intense than anger outside. Anger inside is a full blown hurricane destroying everything. Lovely poem. I thought you conveyed anger very well. Oh, and the French was a lovely little switch. Kind of dips into how anger is a universal thing and that we're all subject to it. It also reminded me to brush up a bit on my french since I'm going to Quebec in February. I haven't taken any classes in months. - Jaime Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe. [This message has been edited by Jaime (01-12-2003 10:48 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Regina~ This is an incredibly well written piece. You've expressed the anger perfectly and done so in an extremely powerful manner. This just screams to be heard...and I did hear. You are such a talented writer, Regina. I hope you'll continue to share your work with us. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Regina, this is so full of passion. I love it. Ditto what Jaime said about the French section. It was a smart thing to add. Languages give pieces such an amazing lift and the French in this truly added to a poem already brimming with emotion. Well done. I hope this person got what was coming to them. ~AF~ Don't steal - the Government hates competition. |
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Susie Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 36Illinois |
WOW!!!that was so greatly expressed!!i loved it and i loved the way u expressed your feelings~i wish i had your talent!!that's going straight to my library!! |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Wow, that was really cool. The french screwed me up a little bit cause i couldn't understand but still, its not what I expected from the title, and I love that. Great job Regina.... Riley Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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