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CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

0 posted 2002-12-28 05:18 PM

This poem is basically about me, and to show that my name is more than something 'cool' I made up

I open my eyes to a blurred image
Trying to finally see
What am I supposed to think
What am I supposed to be?

I try to impress everyone
And I give everything best
But if I can't please myself
How can I please the rest?

I make those around me happy
And help them through their pain
So why do I feel empty inside
Or hurt trying to smile again?

I want to go and be someone
Have a path all my own
But every time I get close
My feelings, I disown

I am confused by my life
Isn't it better to give?
If so, then how come when I help others
It hurts me to live?

Now I am too confused and perplexed
I do not know which road to take
All I see is these clouded dreams
And I fear I have lived a mistake

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

1 posted 2002-12-28 08:11 PM

Brought a tear to my eye. I know what its like to make everyone else happy while I'm being torn apart inside. Keep it up.

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

2 posted 2002-12-28 08:44 PM

good job. Here's another response for you. This was a pretty good poem.

-Stinky Twinkie-

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

3 posted 2002-12-29 01:34 AM

sometimes we have to reserve some space for ourselves. Don't be harsh to yourself. That's normal.

P.S True to Yourself! Cheers

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

4 posted 2002-12-29 01:19 PM

"I make those around me happy
And help them through their pain
So why do I feel empty inside
Or hurt trying to smile again?"

I love that. True True True True True.

Sometimes what you write makes me wonder if we're two peas in a pea carrying device.

Nice work Clouded Dreams!

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

5 posted 2002-12-29 04:12 PM

thanx all, other side, that is funny...who knows.. I might know you somehow!

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2002-12-29 06:23 PM

That was a wonderful poem, wow, that was like me right there. wow.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

7 posted 2002-12-29 10:31 PM

Man... can I ever feel this poem... describes my life perfectly.... Half the time I'm depressed, yet always find the time to help people with their problems, misguided as I sometimes am... you ask a good question in this: why does it hurt so much? If only I had the answer.... This poem is deffinatly going in my library.

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

8 posted 2002-12-29 11:46 PM

This was great. I loved it greatly. I can't really reply right now, lost circulation in my hands due to being on computer too long reading great writings such as this one!! This was awesome, keep it up! ~*~Me~*~

~Loving you isn't the problem, getting too close is.~
*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*Love doesn't make the world go

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