Teen Poetry #6 |
A Quarter and A Phone Booth |
Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"A Quarter and A Phone Booth" (17/12/02) © 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved Verse 1 Was on my way home, when my car said no, right outside this motel. The end of the day, decided to stay, but it would become hell. Had no way to tell, though she knows me well, she gets pretty nervous. I wanted to call, found no phone at all, unwillingly a guest... Refrain Stuck here in this sleezy old motel room Where they don't change the sheets and never clean, Cracks in the walls no glass in the windows Tv, radio or coffee machine. A tiny bed's thrown into the corner And a light ball has the disco fever, I'm a quarter and a phone booth away From telling her that I really need her. Verse 2 Soon as morning showed, was ready to go, but the parts never came. One more night to kill, with overprized bills, it's driving me insane. Wand'ring on my own, fin'lly found a phone, but an unatacthed cord, Sitting in a room, the whole afternoon, solitair's kind of borred. Refrain [This message has been edited by Hallucination (12-17-2002 07:29 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Brian~ This is, without a doubt, my favorite of yours so far. The rhythm and flow of this is excellent. It has such a natural feel about it. I REALLY enjoyed reading this. Your talent is growing and it shows. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
hey, great write. I am feeling frustration from this song. It is really descriptive too. Keep it up! |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
I can feel the mood of the poem. Great write. Eliza Simmons |
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