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LesterVisaya
Junior Member

since 2002-11-16

Posts 21

0 posted 2002-12-17 12:05 PM

I see the shades of yesterday's tears
I know what cycle Im entering
I'll trap myself in a second's drak corner
not wanting to step in
Im seeing my reflection in others
treating them with the sorrows I must go through
seeking for my desire's missing will
I've found freedom that must be locked
It like a circling sun
only to find itself where it has sprouted
Can I not have senses just like anyone else?
I hear answers from God saying I must fall to show what must be shown
once again Im lost in sanitys void..

this poem was written in 5 minutes portraying emotions IMO in a more honest and natural way.

Its about how sometimes we people work so hard for something that we really dont want and how vivid and clear that sometimes a brand "new" day is just another excuse to make us feel good and hide the hidden sorrows when a new day is merely controled by every gloomy emotion we had of the previous day.
Its about being controlled by others will while your own desires fades away and your fueled to go on with this habit by the guilty pain thats been left undealt with in years.

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

1 posted 2002-12-17 06:44 PM

hey good job...we can all relate to that. i really liked to line
"I've found freedom that must be locked"
thanks!

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2002-12-21 02:02 AM

Lester~
You've put a lot of thought and feeling into this
piece and have expressed it well.
Nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

3 posted 2002-12-22 08:17 PM

Wow, very nice job here! I can't believe this got to the second page with only 2 replies. I thought it was wonderful. And upon reading your explanation I liked it even more because I understood exactly what you were saying. Very nice! Keep up the great work!

*Me*
I'm pasteing my smile back on just to please you... I always knew Elmer's glue was good for something...

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