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wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

0 posted 2002-12-17 12:00 PM

"Do your feet hurt?"
"No, they don't" Wow this guy is an idiot
"Well you have been running through my head all day"
He thinks he is just a stud

She turns away, whats their problem?
Why do guys always hit on me?
She dreams of her knight in shining armor
Lame huh, it will never come true

Ouch, that put a spin on his world
Never in his life has he been turned away
That girl was beutiful he thought
maybe he needs to brush up on his pick up lines

She walks home wondering what girl fell for that guy
oddly enough she couldn't get him off her mind
She remembered his face, his blue eyes
dirty blonde hair you just wanted to run your
fingers through

He still can't brush it off
She was amazing, her grace and carelessness
she reminded him of a southern belle
The way they were in the movies, charming

She had to find out who he was
maybe she was wrong to brush him off
his smile, whenever she closed her eyes
his face was their

He had to go, he couldn't stand it
The bar seemed to dull, if only she was there
He left in such a hurry, he needed her
he didn't know why

she reached her doorstep,fumbuling for her keys
man, she thought this wasen't like her
Her mind was on him
She turned around, headed once more for the bar

In one moment their lives collided
He ran into her, he found out where she lived
He helped her up, not glancing at her face
Then their eyes locked

Their lives have been blissfull
Every since that fatefull day
When love brought them together in
The spring of 47

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

rOxXbabY391
Member

since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

1 posted 2002-12-20 04:59 PM

This was really good.. a very good story..
only 1 suggestion tho.. maybe it was 2 much like a story and not enuf like a poem? i dunno lol maybe just for me it was..
i thought it was good how you made the title work in at the very last line
gooood WoRk!
~*~eMiLy~*~

"I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right."

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2002-12-20 11:32 PM

A happy poem here in the dark grim teen poetry! Very good, I liked it alot, was it a true story?

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

3 posted 2002-12-21 05:54 PM

nope it wasn't a true story

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

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