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Rug_Burnt_Loser
Junior Member

since 2002-12-13

Posts 11
>>o.b.l.i.v.i.a.n<<

0 posted 2002-12-15 06:05 PM

Sitting here,
Freezing..
Just so I can be
Alone.
I need someone
Though..
I need an extra
Voice.
Convince me..
This will all
Turn out okay.
Convince me..
It was all
Supposed to be this way.
They were all right.
I ended up broken.

Lying here,
Emptily..
Hoping someone
Can see.
I need some
Attention..
No one has been
Listening.
Since you left..
I don’t see
To matter.
Since you left.
My mind and heart
Seem to have scattered..
They were all right.
I ended up broken.
Again
And again
And again.

"In a photo the size of a kiss, a kiss in the shape of a bullet..."
~GlassJAw~
~siberian.kiss~

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

1 posted 2002-12-15 07:51 PM

"Convince me..
This will all
Turn out okay.
Convince me..
It was all
Supposed to be this way"

Hey great first post! I really really liked this one...hope to see more of your work i will be watching out for it

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

2 posted 2002-12-15 09:08 PM

hey,
this was awesome!!
i luved it !
great first post as rug burnt loser!! lol
so u dont live in oblian or w/e it was b4???
lol well this was reallly good
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

3 posted 2002-12-15 09:21 PM

First off, welcome to Passions

Second, beautiful write; I'm sure you're going to make a wonderful addition to our little "family" here (aw, now I'm getting sappy lol)
Keep writin'!

"it was cute, it was like he was shy and didn't want to make it too obvious"
~ Reena
I'm Rhondiforous!

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

4 posted 2002-12-15 10:05 PM

do u want ppl to no who u r???? oh well i wont tell;-)
i mean that would be weird to me ya no ?? losing all ur postz that would suck but u no u did it for my mom lol yea she dont hate u either and u have to come to my b day party but yea about the poem lol it was good as usual and thatz all there is to say....

###CATHY###

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

[This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (12-15-2002 10:08 PM).]

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

5 posted 2002-12-15 10:39 PM

CATHY HAS 144 POSTS!! 44!! 44!! ok Ihad to do that..
Anyway..yea...welcome to passions..*snickers*
What a wonderful first write..Umm I can`t wait to see you grow as a poet? LOL I cant wait to see more of u!!

*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

xxxnuttyangelxxx
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

6 posted 2002-12-15 11:02 PM

Quote--

Sitting here,
Freezing..
Just so I can be
Alone.
I need someone
Though..

That is a very true statement.. this was a great write ..I Hope to see a lot more of your work..Well done

shea

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

7 posted 2002-12-16 09:55 AM

This was wonderful, you did very well, this felt very real.

Welcome!!

Ps. Devinechild...you took my icon!! lol everytime I see you've replied I think...Wait? Did I already read this?! lol I get confused easily I suppose.

Jenn

"I keep looking, looking for something more." Sara Evans

Rug_Burnt_Loser
Junior Member

since 2002-12-13

Posts 11
>>o.b.l.i.v.i.a.n<<

8 posted 2002-12-17 07:24 PM

A big thanks to you all!!

thanks for making me feel welcome!

((morgan))

"It feels good to know you're all mine
So drive me far
.away.away.away.
I don't care where, just far!!"
~deftones~
~.b.quiet.&.drive.~

[This message has been edited by Rug_Burnt_Loser (12-17-2002 07:24 PM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2002-12-21 02:21 AM

Rug_Burnt_Loser~
Well, I'm gathering from some of the replies,
that you're not really new to the forums,
but I'll say 'Welcome' anyway.
There is a great deal of emotion in this piece
and you've expressed it extremely well.
I felt this one as I read.
I look forward to seeing lots more from you.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Hyper Sensitive
New Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 6
a somnambulist society

10 posted 2002-12-21 08:49 AM

beautiful.

-heatherlynne-

"I'm all by myself, the way I wanna be." - Silverchair

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

11 posted 2002-12-21 02:34 PM

Beautiful first post Morgan! Welcome to Passions! I really enjoyed this first piece, especially the first stanza (which I am not going to copy and paste since 2 ppl have already done it haha). I can't wait to see more!

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

12 posted 2002-12-21 04:11 PM

Nice use of bolds and itallics.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

13 posted 2002-12-21 04:34 PM

nice

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

14 posted 2002-12-21 09:13 PM

You've expressed the feeling very well. Enjoyed your poem.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

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