Complicated.. (any title suggestions???)

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rOxXbabY391
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since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

0 posted 2002-12-14 07:35 PM

Not sure what to think now
Not sure how to feel
Don't know what you're thinking
If you love me still
I don't know what to do now
Do I run or should I stay?
Do I fight for you of sit and wait
Or don't go either way
My options are very simple
But it's all so complicated
I can't see how you feel towards me
And it gets me so frustrated
Are you down for her, or still for me?
Or are you just so blind that you can't see:
how much I've liked you and for how long
That I just can't see what all went wrong

xxxnuttyangelxxx
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since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

1 posted 2002-12-14 07:41 PM

well hello again.. lol u just keep on writing writing writing lol.. any was this was another good poem.. when i was readin it, it reminded me of my first true love and my best friend took that person from me .. it suxx!!.. i hope this isnt happening to you

shea

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

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Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2002-12-16 02:54 PM

rOxXbabY391
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since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

3 posted 2002-12-16 09:30 PM

heyYy thanx for your comments!! :-D pplease if you have ANYthing to say about any of my poems dont be afraid to do so! :-D and i dont have any 'set titles' for any of them so if you have any suggestions i would appreciate it! thanxxxx ~*~eMiLy~*~

"I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right.

LTEvans
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since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
Lenham, England

4 posted 2002-12-17 01:12 AM

Really good poem.

However one question did you by any chance happen to be listening to that Avrile Lavigne song while/before you wrote this?

Just wondering, because I often find myself using song lyrics by accident, they sort of sit there at the back of your head and then jump out on you when you are not expecting it.

Just edited this because it looks critical. So as one final note I would like to say that the rest of this poem is superb.

Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian.

LTEvans

[This message has been edited by LTEvans (12-17-2002 01:14 AM).]

rOxXbabY391
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since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

5 posted 2002-12-17 03:53 PM

thank you by the way! but no i dont listen to avril lavinge lol but which part had lyrics of the song in it? sry i really try to be original
~*~eMiLy~*~

"I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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6 posted 2002-12-17 05:35 PM

I can see the sumularities to Avril Lavigne but it is just the rhyme between "complicated" and "frustrated" really...

I really enjoyed this peice, I hope to see more of your work around, thank you for sharing.

Andrew

roxywrestlegirl04
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since 2002-10-29

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good ole DINWIDDIE

7 posted 2002-12-18 10:12 AM

i really like this one!! i know how this kinda stuff goes!! thanx for all the comments on my poems!! i really like you comments!! KEEP UP THE good....GREAT WORK!!! haha....LIZ

live,love,and die...but take RISKS..thatz what makes life worth the living, love worth the heartache,and death the new beginning!

rxyfxy04
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since 2002-11-26

Posts 54
lil' town in Virginia

8 posted 2002-12-18 10:36 AM

hey.. this is the first one i have read from you and i like it ALOT!! a title suggestion could be "not sure" mm.. but i dont know.. i look forward to readin more from you!!

RxyFxy04

rOxXbabY391
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since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

9 posted 2002-12-18 03:42 PM

lol thanxx good suggestion!! I am OFFICIALLY renaming it "UnSure" :-D
but im still taking suggestions.. hehe
~*~eMiLy~*~

CloudedDreams
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since 2002-11-23

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My Fantasy Realm

10 posted 2002-12-18 08:32 PM

Hpw about "Strained Emotions" ?

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

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