Teen Poetry #6 |
jar |
wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
Thinking of my world as an empty jar longing for things of intrest to fill me things gather in me like coins or notes something that can I can call mine I don't want to be filled with junk But when your not filled people can see right through you naked, lonely i stand on a shelf no one wants to fill me fill me to the brim with such a love that i long for, will it not come will my jar be ever overflowing i long for it too, but i doubt maybe doubt fills my jar can you empty doubt? if you can tell me i want to be filled with something useful " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I liked this one, Malloree. I liked the imagery. Good job. (N' no, I'm not talking about the naked part...) - Cody - |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
dirty cody dirty " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
LOL-Cody This was a great work..I really liked the imagry and the visuals and ok the whole poem *Allison* |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
HTe imagry and metaphors you used helped capture the emotion in how you feel. Great job on that. Keep it coming! Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it? |
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