Open Poetry #22 |
Glimpse Of Her Existence |
Inuwindow Junior Member
since 2002-08-29
Posts 12 |
Glimpse Of Her Existence She lays me down, upon the soft wet sand of her island, She runs gallantly, towards a strength beyond her beauty. Whimsically, she ventures beyond mighty oceans rule, Gathering cresting foam from its tidal destiny. Other people tread upon me, tossing sand carelessly, Daylight surrenders to dusk, as dreams take reality. Alone, I am waiting, for a glimpse of her existence, Anticipating, her arrival upon my smiling face. Smiling, she finally arrives dripping with joy, I want to wrap her in a comfortable embrace, Wipe the sandbar echoes, from between her toes, Blanket her, in my terrycloth fibers for all eternity. [This message has been edited by Inuwindow (08-29-2002 10:30 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
YAY!!! Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, this is a romantic gorgeous debut, YAY!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Inuwindow Junior Member
since 2002-08-29
Posts 12 |
Thank you for your reply, I wrote this after reading a challenge here. Glad you enjoyed it, and your welcoming words are very kind. Thanks again. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Welcome to Piptalk, Inuwindow... A very lovely first post also... I just love the way you gave life to that towel... ~ welcoming hugs from the chipmunk Lyra |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I love it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
Hi ! And WELCOME!! Don't think you have anything to worry about! Reads as if she wants to stay in that embrace for all eternity ! This was very good, and I look forward to reading more of your posts, so don't be a stranger! Kitty * That which gives light, must endure burning * |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! This was a charming read, I hope to see more from you soon. Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I enjoyed the write.....and love your name!.....(It's almost as good as Toerag don't ya think?...LOL) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Inuwindow Welcome and I enjoyed the read. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
enjoyed the images ..reminds me to go to the beach someday soon... welcome M |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Welcome to Passions Inuwindow!! I hope you find as much love here as I have. I love your first post!! It is so soft with affection! Keep it up! Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You are making me miss the ocean today. Wiping the wet sand from between the toes....I remember that detail so well. This is a very nice write! Welcome to Passions. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
your handle is apt it would appear nice poem brian |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Other people tread upon me, tossing sand carelessly, Daylight surrenders to dusk, as dreams take reality. Alone, I am waiting, for a glimpse of her existence, Anticipating, her arrival upon my smiling face. This is incredible. Welcome to Passions. What a lovely poem to debut with. Enjoyed. |
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maggie Junior Member
since 2002-08-30
Posts 15 |
I liked your poem very much. As soon as I read it, I had images in my mind. Congratulations, I hope I will be able to write as well as you do!!! Maggie |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very nicely done, good imagery and makes one want to be that towel....lying there waiting...to give all they have to the one who feels the terry of the cloth... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Inuwindow There is much tenderness in this embrace of sand and loving towel...beautifully done! Welcome to Passions! |
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