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Backlighting
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Backlighting The back of the storm circles the edge, multi-strange-colors at oh-storm-thirty dusk comes in and out, quicksilvering slim lightening threads off and out there, giant rumblings trembling slowly this way, a backwash of what could have been yellowing golds backlighting the underside of cottonwood’s leaves grays on grey’s white yellow tinged pink accumulations of formations all is a strange other world and I stand golden in summer sultry haze azaleas and camellias come to mind, another yard, a different state a planting of promises that were seen only once... we had dug deep in that postage stamp yard, to put fragrance of rose and color of gladiola into being thin young trees planted for someday’s voluptuous shade memories now as backlit as the back of the storm circling the edge allows ~*~ slightly revised |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
and I stand golden in summer sultry haze this is my favorite line in this very desriptive piece Karilea. Well done. If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"thin young trees planted for someday’s voluptuous shade memories now as backlit as the back of the storm circling the edge allows"   (smiles) Oh Karilea, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I have so many fond memories of sitting in the shade near rivers and relaxing feeling the spring breeze whisper! (sigh) I always love your gorgeous words, sweet friend, I am a big fan, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A captivating style to portray the wake of the storm...well done. ThisDiamond |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
azaleas and camellias come to mind, another yard, a different state a planting of promises that were seen only once... Karilea - I have lived this poem before!! A very wonderful read with morning tea. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
The storm flows beyond with the words of life. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
With such a command of descriptive imagery, I am sure you do stand golden on any platform that you choose. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sunshine, It's oh-storm-o'clock and all is well because you let it be well. Mike |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like the way you described things. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
No wonder they made the Wizard of Oz - this is not a good picture in my mind to tell you the truth - but it sure was painted well. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sun, I know only one person who can write to this depth...and do it so fully and beautifully.... YOU! |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
you painted a perfect picture with finely brushed images..this is marvelous poetry  CherPoetry is: |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You are all....more than kind. There is a mystery to poetry...one that not all understand. Those that understand...are of the chosen few. Thank you all. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Oh what marvelous imagery you have, Karilea... The better to write you with...I guess, said the hungry wolf... (LOL) I especially loved the "multi-strange colors at oh storm thirty" and "grays on grey's white yellow tinged pink" this sounds tornadic to me... and... I also loved "memories now as backlit as the back of the storm circling the edge allows" and I also loved....... the rest of the poem, every single word... You are a true poet, Karilea...  ~ loving hugsLyra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kariela You have made me crave a storm...a big, loud and colorful one. Lovely poetry and memory book! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
My favorite lines is... and I stand golden in summer sultry haze Karilea - You are truly golden, and summer has nothing that can match you. |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Fading Light it is in the last of Summer that roots danced with expectation and we ceased to hunt the sun listening to last heartbeats of starlight with chilled anticipation of a Fall we scattered seeds of crystal snow memories a sacred gaping hole and we were planted for this is how flowers grow ( a mini inspired by golden summer of Sunshine) [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (08-29-2002 10:10 PM).] |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
I love storms and especially your poetic description of them, together they are a wonderful blend. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Dang Karilea! How did I almost miss this one??!! Perhaps I was away..or only part of me had returned...perhaps.  Fantastic imagery as only you can write! Love this keeper...sure do! ~Hugs YOU~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wherever a poet stands he/she is backlit by Sunshine Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (09-04-2002 04:36 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
as if I was there.... your usual style and flair my friend... wonderful read. |
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