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One African Night
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One African Night |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Migrating from my nylon cocoon A multicoloured woollen mess Like a butterfly gone wrong I scratch my freshly grown beard Boots laced I step outside Cold air sears my lungs Shingle crunching under foot Never have I known such quiet The clouds below me now A million stars fill spacious skies The full moon has risen as promised Revealing kilimanjaro in all its majesty |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
This is lovely. I could see the view in all it's splendor. Nicely done. Touch me with your whispers, |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
cool I like If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Thanks guys |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  Yay!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I have never been to Africa but dream so much of going to certain places there (in the summer, of course) and seeing this mighty mountain! (big hugggssssss)n This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aaron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Zall~ Welcome to Passions~ I enjoyed the metaphor references in this~ And ... Kilamanjaro ... just the name of it is poetry in itself ... agree ? Thank you for turning a photo-page in my mind~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like Cold hands means a warm heart |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Zall, Reminds me of that Hemingway treatise on lion-hunting in Africa, as well as his short story The Snows of Kilimanjaro -- and there's that other one with the guy who finally does something right, while he thinks he's dying, by killing a lion. *ahem* Anyway ... Makes me want to visit! Mike |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hello fellow junior pip member---I guess we are what could be considered 'pip'squeeks! LOL Anyway, I enjoyed your poem. Looks like you're off to a great start! Love, Light & Laughter Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Zall Interesting write, enjoyed the read. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I've only seen that mountain in pictures but I still figured out where you might have been by your second verse.... I liked your description. wanna see it upclose and personal one day.... intoxicating read.... thankyou. Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Thank you all for your praise, I just posted the second part into 'open' Hope you like it Thanks Again Aaron |
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