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The Moon |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: The Moon Where is that host that lantern light? That ghost I use to speak at night. That lavaliere that hung the sky Where does it rear where does it lie? No moon or magic can I find Could it be I’m going blind? I know for some it glows warm gold Could it be I’m growing old? Where is that moon I used to know? That lived in phantoms fancies glow. That fired all the alchemy That set my heart and minds a spree? It’s turned from gold to silvers glare Chilled of ice and gray of wear. It wears a shroud a lace of web It airs a cloud of subtle ebb. Dancing me a tenuous rhyme As sands slip down and spill my time. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know the feeling Seymour...the moon will shine again for you, just like the sun will rise. It's just a cycle. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Where is that host that lantern light? That ghost I use to speak at night. That lavaliere that hung the sky Where does it rear where does it lie? ======================================== Where is that moon I used to know? That lived in phantoms fancies glow. That fired all the alchemy That set my heart and minds a spree? It's turned from gold to silvers glare Chilled of ice and gray of wear. It wears a shroud a lace of web It airs a cloud of subtle ebb. Dancing me a tenuous rhyme As sands slip down and spill my time. =================================== I dont know which is more impressive..the imagery or the vocabulary...the word play or the cadence...all I do know is...no matter what the mood of your muse...your poetry always shines. Where's the moon? After reading this...me thinks its in your pen  *winkiewinkie*    In the space between now and then |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
PS, Thank you for the read always enjoy your comments. JM, You know I was only funning. I'll meet you by the singing falls make some tea and I will call my Randy to fly me to the ball. WWRS  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ahh this is lovely Sy! And...the moon, she is a full one now, for sure. Enjoyed the morning read love. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Rewrite? my Delight! the moon was fantabulous last night... but the winds are bringing in the summer storms... good for us! Thanks for the read, my friend! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-23-2002 09:52 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
always feeling the glow of the moon in your writes Sy.  M |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enchantress Good morning darling and hugs back. Sunshine, Hugs and kisses and stay out of the comming rain. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
nakdthoughts Thank you sweet, |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Where's that moon?...from gold to silver's glare....(Look at that poem Balladeer wrote about me....and there's a picture right at the top of the author....there's that moon. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This was lovely Seymour, and I enjoyed reading it this grey morning. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Toe, That's not a full moon only half a moon. And I did look at what Mike said about you. LOL Cris, Thank you for the read and nice comment. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
~Seymour I wouldn't miss your moon - not now nor in this month of swoon When upon this August night I would see it glowing bright I'd glance and say-Oh Sy I see your moon glow dancing by~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, Yes it would dance bye, it danced bye me. Thank you sweet. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Seymour - I love the moon, full of romance it can be. For some reason I seem to be writing more about it, must be the magic of it... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Seymour, this is sooooo beautiful, I love the moon, may its magic always bring inspiration to your heart! (big hugggssssss) Sounds like you have a bad case of full moon fever, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
Ya know what I think ? I think the moon will always be there for you! All you need to do is to get glasses...maybe? (If you don't have them already)?? Seriously, I liked this a lot. In fact I always read your poems but don't have the chance to reply too often! Kitty * That which gives light, must endure burning * |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bill, Oh yes there is magic in the moon. Thank you Bill. Noah, I can always depend on you. Dear Kitty, What a nice reply, I hope you find more time to respond to my other poems. Thank you. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
There was a full moon here in St. Catharines last night, and now? this poem - talk about perfect timing...consider me a 'moonie' now. I'm with Janet, the vocab, imagery, emotion and classic style is beyond compare. I'm moved by it's joyful and melancholy tone, and, yet, it is so beautiful throughout. Just when I think I've read your best, you further impress with the next! Yet another keeper (I have so many of your poems saved in my library already - and it's an honour) Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound...or a smiling mouth" ~Kahlil Gibran~ [This message has been edited by Honeybee (08-23-2002 09:20 PM).] |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Dear Sy-Wonderful write, but I suspect when you find that moon once more it will be just as you left it, lost between high and low tides. Somewhere I have confidence in you that you will find the perfect balance between the two. Hugs to you my friend. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Those moonbeamers will no doubt return soon.  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my - lost your moon - check your email, he he Lovely as usual, what would my day be without your poetry, incomplete is what it would be. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy I have lost the moon, too... hope you and I can find it soon. Always enjoy your poetry! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, You are one of the finest poets on the forum. And your lovely comment is an honor. And I will say the last poem I read of yours was almost an epopee. Gemini Hugs back and thank you for the read and reply. Midnitesun, No doubt they will, thank you sweet. Sharon, You are a dear, |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You may have lost the moon, Sy...but you will always have the stars in your eyes... I can tell that by reading your beautiful poems.  ~ starry hugsLyra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lyra, Well I do for you. |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Wonderous job with this one Seymore!!!!! I loved the last two lines of this. It truly is one for the library!! A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lyra, Well if you do I do. Krishankins Thank you so much for the wonderful reply. |
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