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Jig |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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drone drone drone the dulcimer drone the possible drone a joining of melody gossamer droning a patter a clap at the dance you drone in a circle and drone in a trance and pound the floor pound the beams pound the earth until it seems the pounding will waken the people that sleep you pound for the soul and pound for the heat and dance the dulcimer dance the dreams dance the twirling of spherical glee the dancing of life is a pleasure to be we dance on a fire and dance in the sea the rhythm is ancient the rhythm is free you don't need to move and you don't need to see the rhythm is bigger than you and than me to hear it just listen to simplicity I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
YEAH !! I FELT THIS !! I MOVED WITH IT !! ;-) Kitty * That which gives light, must endure burning * |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Oh I simply love this. The rhythm, the message, the words. Everything. A great write and an enjoyable read. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A jig yesay? Indeed, it was. This had the music in it, it did! Shakin' the dust from the rafters it does! ~Ed In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
Kitty -- I'm glad it did! WhiteRose -- Thank you, very much Wranx -- the rafters needed cleanin anyways, eh?  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Indeed this has music, bri... I tapped my foot in want of dance as I read. Very rhythmic, and downright witchily chant-like--I could even "picture" the sound of "rain" between verses... ABSOLUTELY ENCHANTING! (and btw? I read this a few hundred times... ) |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thankyoukaren brian |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I love the spin and twirl of words, and found myself tapping my feet in rhythm! BRAVO! |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thanks midnitesun It had the effect I hoped for brian |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Reminds of those spim-spabular, rim-tim-tabular bells in one of Poe's more sing-songy flights.  , bri.m. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
mike, I couldn't carry Edgar's jockstrap, but, I appreciate the comp. and I liked the way you flung those words against the wall poem? brian |
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misery_made_beautiful Junior Member
since 2002-08-10
Posts 36 |
Nice one here Bri I like the flow and the lyrical quality of it. Good visuals "Aging keeps life interesting" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Brian, this is excellent, I love it! Yes, simplicity is the key to happiness and elimination of desire and may we comfort ourselves with a special peace! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you nfor sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i was singing the meter, repeating your rhythm rhymed. your verse is aligned with music, wooing me in a trance along each line.... and so i dance your song in time! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Can't write a reply right now! I'm still rockin'and rollin' and groovin' and movin' and loosing myself in you---I mean, your writing! Linda |
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