Fragile acetate/She will suffer

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bsquirrel

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0 posted 2002-08-22 11:48 AM

An older poem.

Mike

Fragile acetate/She will suffer
What color would your eyes be by a candle near the mirror?
I cannot imagine the music framing those words.
A fragile acetate in your hand: She Will Suffer.
That's all I know. What else have you heard?

A tape marked Come Home at the End of October.
She wrote it all out to you in autumn tree light.
Your guitar is waiting for your lap in the attic.
Pluck the first string, the dust as slow hued as the night.

A playlist of past actions.
You never know when you'd need
different beds with different pillows;
the same bodies, different minds.

Go home and write your song.
What was it, Snow On the Water?
White flecks and specks crashing
on the wave. What's the matter?

Don't worry about goodbyes,
just watch the latches spread.
Line the walk with black notes
of her final score: All in Red.

As patterns seem to form
I feel it cold and warm.
-Joy Division

Anvrill
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1 posted 2002-08-22 12:14 PM

You were even writing about stringed instruments then, hm?

I love you, baby.

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

VAS
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2 posted 2002-08-22 12:19 PM

Ah, a master of metaphors herein!

You do amazing things, bsquirrel!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

bsquirrel

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3 posted 2002-08-22 04:36 PM

Thank you both.

Anvrill
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4 posted 2002-08-23 10:09 AM

Oh, creative response, baby.

Acknowledge when I comment, and I won't be a mopey li'l bitch, k? Better fr all the world.

Me and my paycheck and my brother's credit card about to get me my Tragedy doll.

We'll see about yrs next paycheck, if they're still left. Hell, if they're still left fr me...

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

WhileIWasGone
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5 posted 2002-08-23 11:07 AM

This is soooo beautiful....Enjoyed much!

DeaDiAmore

bsquirrel

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6 posted 2002-08-23 11:37 AM

Thank you three.

Madame Chipmunk
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7 posted 2002-08-25 08:12 PM

Okay Mr.Squrril...
in light of your garrulous resonses to replies...
I loved it...

~ hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (08-25-2002 08:12 PM).]

WhiteRose
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8 posted 2002-08-25 08:14 PM

And I loved it too

Nice stuff!

bsquirrel

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9 posted 2002-08-25 09:13 PM

Heh heh. Glad you both enjoyed this poem. I'm not exactly sure what "She will suffer" has to do with a fragile acetate, but I think that's the title on the acetate. Hmm, maybe I should reread this myself...

Zinsser
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10 posted 2002-09-06 11:43 AM

I love this....
great!

~~ Connie ~~

bsquirrel

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11 posted 2002-09-06 11:45 AM

Wow, thanks for unburying and enjoying, Connie.

Mike

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2002-09-06 12:06 PM

"Snow on the Water"---conjures up so many images, concepts, emotions...the list goes on.

Wonderfully written---You are a maestro conducting a symphony of metaphors!

Have a good day Mike!
Linda

Cpat Hair

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13 posted 2002-09-06 01:00 PM

Don't worry about goodbyes,
just watch the latches spread.
Line the walk with black notes
of her final score: All in Red

what a strng ending to fine piece... certainly have enjoyed reading your words of late... it is always good to read talented people that have a unique way of expressing things...

Krishankins

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14 posted 2002-09-06 01:05 PM

Dang! Mike, you have infinite talent, man!! I love this piece!!!!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

bsquirrel

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15 posted 2002-09-06 01:47 PM

Linda, I'm glad this poem stirred up some snow within you.

Cpat, I'm enjoying yours words, too. Keep 'em comin'!

Kris, nah, just by being mortal, and therefore someday dying, shows that our talent is quite finite.

Mikey

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